Open Poetry #19 |
Narcissus |
Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(This is a little different from my usual love style, just a thought I had to get off of my chest from my past) Narcissus By: Noah Eaton 3/29/02 There is gone and you're not here You're high on the pedestal but you can't see down below And from up there it must feel so cold It seems you don't need anyone else Other than your TV and yourself I come home crying and you do nothing at all You think you have it all But right when you've begun, you seem to fall Whatever floats your boat Is all right with me I just can't bear to hear you tell "All I've tried to do is help!" It's nice to know you but you can't help me anymore I've been waiting in vain But you don't even care You're so self-centered If I say I am in pain To you its just another cliche So I'll just turn and walk away I've always taken the heart to listen But you always make it sound so ridiculous You think I seem so sardonic I'd rather be stuck in a Mardi Gras traffic Or crawl through cornfields until I get sick Then having to listen to your excuses without even trying You think you have it all But right when you've begun, you seem to fall Whatever floats your boat Is all right with me You change the subject in impromptu I can never get across to you I could stay listening to your excuses but I have more important things to do I've been waiting in vain But you don't even care You're so self-centered If I say I am in pain It must sound like some cliche So I'll just turn and walk away I've been waiting in vain But you don't even care You're so self-centered If I say I am in pain It must sound like some cliche So I'll just turn and walk away Where am I going? [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-28-2002 07:28 PM).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I could stay listening to your excuses but I have more important things to do Sure do understand this, Noah...it's good to know when to move on. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful deep thoughts here Noah! Enjoyed the read tonight! Hugs. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Moving on in life with old feelings that lay dormant in us but still come to life in pain. Nice write. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Noah darling boy now this is one of your utter utter best, I love it. YOU have such a fabulous talent and in this you portray it to pure perfection. Outstanding writing as always you show how well you can write I love the way you show such inner strength in this. Full of metaphors truly wonderful, moving on is always hard, but it’s the only way to go. None of us can rewind our lives, much as we think we’d like to. Excellent writing darling boy absolutely excellent writing Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
you are such a sweet, loving person! I don't understand how any could be so cruel to ignore you in your time of need! I am always here for you, night or day, 24-7, whenever, wherever (hugs) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I'm glad this is past, Noah. Strong write. And hey, thanks for reading some of my old poems, you are the only one who ever does that Sandra |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Very visual. I can feel where you're coming from. ~Chrissy "No one has ever loved ~anyone~ the way ~everyone~ wants to be loved" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Noah one of the good things about life is that sooner or later we will find someone that is concerned about our needs and desires...James |
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