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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-03-27 09:43 AM

She reminded me
Of the sea

Eyes of green
Changed color with each
Passing shadow or turn
Of head to again look
At waves of people
Rushing to and fro

Back and forth

As she
Washed upon the senses
Of any who paused to look

Still storms brewed
In the depths of her
And if the barometer smile
Fell lower she would indeed
Become tempestuous
Threatening safe harbor
Of anyone moored in her heart

She reminded me of the sea
With beaches inviting languor
Soaking warmth in wet comfort

But hurricane season is near
And the flags are out

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-03-27 09:55 AM

Dang...

many thanks for this one!

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2002-03-27 10:00 AM

dang? hmmm... your language is getting pretty strong isn't it? (chuckling)

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2002-03-27 10:03 AM

Ron

Again you use nature in such a unique way to portray emotion and personality. Well done!!

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2002-03-27 10:05 AM

Thank You Martie... nature is a perfect metaphor for what is inside of us... plus it is something I can halfway understand. People on the other hand..( chuckling) are not always so evident.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2002-03-27 10:11 AM

CPatHair~
I liked everything about this write~
How cleverly you introduce us to the stormy 'green eyes'~

There is a soft undercurrent running through this one~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2002-03-27 10:16 AM

Thanks Marge...so glad you found omething in it to like.. as always, your comment is appreciated!!!

Opeth
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since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

7 posted 2002-03-27 10:28 AM

"She reminded me of the sea
With beaches inviting languor
Soaking warmth in wet comfort"

I could smell the salt and feel the sand.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2002-03-27 10:33 AM

Thanks Opeth... glad it provided you with such a vivid image..

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

9 posted 2002-03-27 10:54 AM

She reminded me of the sea
With beaches inviting languor
Soaking warmth in wet comfort

But hurricane season is near
And the flags are out

The calm before the storm, then the storm...she is both, I think.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2002-03-27 11:03 AM

Duality... exists in all things I think.
Appreciate your stopping by..and the words my friend.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2002-03-27 02:59 PM

WOW!! Ron I started to choose my favorite lines, but, ended up with the entire piece...so just let me say that this one is very very special! The imagery here is fantastic...I love the feel, and well...okay, thank you for this keeper! Hugs.

*Nancy realizes she was gushing and exists room blushing*

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

12 posted 2002-03-28 08:45 AM

Can I join Nancy in gushing?

~gush gush~

I don't usually gush..but honestly...this is a gush piece for sure...

K

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

13 posted 2002-03-28 08:59 AM

Cpat Hair,
Always nice to read about the alter ego, enjoyed

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

14 posted 2002-03-28 12:25 PM

(smiles) Ooohhhhh...this is fabulous, sweet friend, I love it! (big hugggssssss) Your words symbolize the weather and make great metaphors for emotions, sweet friend, this is superb, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

15 posted 2002-03-28 10:32 PM

Still storms brewed
In the depths of her
And if the barometer smile
Fell lower she would indeed
Become tempestuous
Threatening safe harbor
Of anyone moored in her heart

Those are some wonderful lines,
certainly is one way to send out a warning!
Oh my, I loved this storm watch!

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