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A Handful of Dreams
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A Handful of Dreams |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA 
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When you get to the good part and sweat drips down the mast an alarm call breaks the storyline The best endings fade so fast. You're stuck with broken promises And can't complete the scene. All you ever really wanted Was a handful of dreams Goldenrod and poppies sway, your hair reflects in shiny shoulders A lover pulled into tight embrace Magellan hands getting bolder. But time is all-wrong here no sunlight to this day Molten desire turns to angst When this dream is burnt away And all you ever wanted in life Was a handful of sweet dreams You can't live with broken promises Things are never as they seem. (C) Picasso Lyrics 2000 |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Bummer! Life's disappointments can be so devastating...and this certainly aches of the sentiment. May your muse find a more beautiful day ahead!! Well done and take care!  |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Sad shadow but most beautiful. a wonderful write. floria Floria |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Kat, afternoon! How be ya today? I wrote this over a year ago, as a series of songs. The repetitive verse is the chorus. So often i write of things that happen to others, or fictional others, but just wanted to tell both you and Floria: thank you! Life is good. I have no complaints. Just a song, perhaps that everybody feels at some time or another. Y'all are waaaaay too kind to worry, tho. ~happy sigh~ nice to be worried about, ya know? *s* Jeff |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Jeff darling boy this is utterly spectacular writing, this has some of the best lines I’ve ever seen A lover pulled into tight embrace Magellan hands getting bolder. And all you ever wanted in life Was a handful of sweet dreams You can't live with broken promises Things are never as they seem. Have you any idea how superior these lines are? I love the cohesion of this, the total connectivity of it is awesome. None of us can be all we can if we feel disconnected I really love this. The flow is utterly utterly perfect. As always darling boy your writing shines. Truly this is one of your utter best. Absolutely perfectly divine writing  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Jeff, this is sooooo beautiful but sad too, sweet friend, it too always saddens me to see dreams longing to come true be delayed and then they are like yellow roses dropped to the ground and forsaken before their time does come! (sigh) This is emotionally powerful, sweet friend, I love this song, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jeff, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Yes, I can see that this would make a gorgeous song. Did you ever put a tune to it? I sure hope so. Will I hear it on the radio anytime soon? If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ShadowRider, Excellent write, but then I've come to expect that of you. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i dont remember this one jeff..but i sure do love it..hugss ~Victoria
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I agree with Tracey, Jeff...this would make a beautiful song...and there is so much truth in your lines. And all you ever wanted in life Was a handful of sweet dreams You can't live with broken promises Things are never as they seem. Unfortunately, some of us find this out too late. Beautifully written, Jeff  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
And all you ever wanted in life Was a handful of sweet dreams You can't live with broken promises Things are never as they seem. This is so very true, and why I chose to follow mine...loved it sweetie!  |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
"And all you ever wanted in life Was a handful of sweet dreams You can't live with broken promises Things are never as they seem." no words ever so well expressed my friend...this is a wonderfully written poem with much thought... go for your dreams is what i say just make sure they are realistic. take care. amy "you can't stop |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is a beautiful and sad song. I have felt it many times. Sandra |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
My friends, please excuse my lack of response. My computer processor ate itself (had a darn fine meal of it, too). I hope, somehow, you will see that i didn't ignore you intentionally. Forgive my lack of technical manners and thank you very very much for your kind response to my song. Jeff |
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