Open Poetry #19 |
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He Used to Call me Girl |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California ![]() |
He Used to Call me Girl He used to call me girl Summer nights when the top was down In his little red car blowing my hair That caught him in a smile he drove Through the summer hills And I felt their round curves were my own His car like a hand fast and holding the road The hills are weathered brown now And creases sag againstthe base Where a stern looking steer Eyes the snake of road That caresses the haze Waiting for water from a long ago time Where he remembers a stream I can see how this land was formed By the palm of an ocean And rain came hard and ran its fingers Across the valley The round curves are my own again Cloaked in a piece of hot fabric Passed down through time to blend against the sky In a pale thought that believes In continuance And some sturdy knap That sometimes rubs out time And sometimes saves it In a memory that never changes So like the sea he was His skin like salt his tidal hands came Into the inlets of my youth and touched Something that would never be the same Except when I remember That he used to call me girl |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() ![]() ![]() (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I always love how you tell such wonderful stories with your words, may his love forever touch your heart and have the river of your heart flowered with pride and joy! (kiss on cheek) Your words always make me smile, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! ![]() ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I can see how this land was formed By the palm of an ocean And rain came hard and ran its fingers Across the valley The round curves are my own again Cloaked in a piece of hot fabric Passed down through time to blend against the sky In a pale thought that believes In continuance And some sturdy knap That sometimes rubs out time And sometimes saves it In a memory that never changes So like the sea he was His skin like salt his tidal hands came Into the inlets of my youth and touched Something that would never be the same Except when I remember That he used to call me girl ==================================== *shaking my head* I'll call you poet and then thank you for being so and allowing me to read them... this is more impressive than I have words for. heart-hugs mothy me Of all the things in me I could never be, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So like the sea he was His skin like salt his tidal hands came Into the inlets of my youth and touched Something that would never be the same Except when I remember That he used to call me girl ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Oh Martie Martie Martie!! Once again I am speechless...yet, inside there seems to be so much going on that I want to say.... This is very very special....thank you for this keeper. Hugs. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Martie, I'm not sure how you do that...but I like it. Well done. Thanks. ![]() |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
So like the sea he was His skin like salt his tidal hands came Into the inlets of my youth and touched Something that would never be the same I am constantly amazed by your writing, Martie... ![]() copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
absolutely brilliant, marty......damn, you are SO good!!! |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Absolutely fabulous Martie. Just love those last two stanza’s especially, though I love the whole piece. Mesmerizing. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
one of your best my California flower friend. A true pleasure to read and experience. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I impressed...this kind of gently touches my mind...James |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ You have worn your ink in smiles of ago~ How very becoming~ 'The round curves are my own again Cloaked in a piece of hot fabric Passed down through time to blend against the sky In a pale thought that believes In continuance And some sturdy knap That sometimes rubs out time And sometimes saves it In a memory that never changes' Brilliant poetess~ *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Can't do better than what already has been said. ![]() ![]() |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What they all said, and I am keeping it ![]() ~* Reality is an illusion ~ albeit a persistant one *~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
such a profound way of seeing things you have Martie! I always love to read you though I don't say it much. |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Wow... very nicely done Martie... very nice indeed. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Take me down that road with you anytime, girl, for I remember the curves we once tried to straighten out, it was that long ago... |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So like the sea he was His skin like salt his tidal hands came Into the inlets of my youth and touched Something that would never be the same Except when I remember That he used to call me girl I don't think I can add to what's already been said... so I'll just sit here and bask in the pleasure of reading. *S* Brilliant! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
martie, this is a gorgeously stunning write! your imagery in this perfection, and im really at a loss to say much else... just know that i enjoyed this tremendously, such a lovely memory this is! take care. amy ![]() "you can't stop |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Breathlessly soft...it reminds me of a series of snapshots..yet, somehow blended together... thanks for pointing it my way Martie.. hugs ![]() |
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