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Model For Me |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She wasn’t what most Would call a beauty. She weighed a bit more Than the fashions dictate In their anorexic passion To take all the substance Out of what women look like And instead turn them into lewd caricatures of Pre pubescence. Her hair did not Always behave Nor did she She wasn’t what most Would call refined She liked a cold beer Could belch and laugh at herself, Picked at food with her fingers When distractions drove her someplace Inside the walls she had so carefully built From stones thrown at her over the years By the ones who were supposed to love her She wasn’t perhaps… Until she looked at me With those eyes that swallowed Every bit of my soul Leaving the empty inside Wishing she would model for me Her naked thoughts |
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lunatic Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 172 |
This is beautiful, you rascal  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
can't resist whenever I see "nakedthoughts" I really liked this one..I don't fit that bill..although tthe non-anorexic look is me for sure *s M love the tenderness *s "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh, oh, oh....I just love this.....*big smile* you captured 'that look' that special look that 2 people share so perfectly...mostly its just 'wishes' on both parts, but sometimes, its more...you captured that part too wonderful write |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You have managed to make her more than beautiful...you've made her into a classic... and a Keeper... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it's always that look isn't it?? well done Sir. . .great work. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron She sounds a bit like someone I know..loved this tender look through your eyes. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I really enjoyed this one very much. *smiles* ~Tier |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ron, Leave it to you to spot a true beauty! Way cool write. I loved it. Very well done. Thanks. Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, your beautiful words always touch us, this is wonderful! (big hugggsssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is a true gem! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Oh yes...love this one...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I can't begin to tell you how much I liked this one... but it's being saved for many re-readings. *S* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Many thanks to everyone for their comments! Pure fiction folks... written from an observation of a couple the other day and my over active imagination taking it someplace it probably never was. Thanks again!!!! |
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