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A Different Color Ink
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A Different Color Ink |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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There is sun strong in her eyes as she sits below it skin bowing to the drought it will cause. The distance between her reasoning and her responsibility is an exceptional emptiness. Stains plunder skin and weaken with the cool decided movement of agony. She's breathed the silence of an indiffernt moment or maybe more and spins within a haze that crashed into her foolish inner world. There is sun strong in her eyes as she bows to it because she knows that this Spring the storms will soon, with cruel fingers take the usual glory of Spring from her normally easy breathing heart. there is nothing in this momentary destination but scars and the stupidity of worth. How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Shun that sun, That reddens your neck and eyes, Blast the wind That you in syncopation sighs, There’ll be crash And things of spring gone asunder Washed by bright Burnt with days of rolling thunder, But when gone, The spring, the summer and the fall, Come the ice Then spring will make a return call. Each harsh year Marks the flesh with scars of passing, With more lines Worth the stupidity of the blasting Wearing well On redden neck and sparkled eyes. Gloom |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
The distance between her reasoning and her responsibility is an exceptional emptiness. I can really relate to this line. Loved the write! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
what's that poem?? "April is the cruelest month. . . " I think that's it. . . this reminded me of that line. . . well done. . .  ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow! take the season, and turn into feelings... Well done.. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
"Tell me what it makes you feel or how it makes you feel..Be honest..I dare you. " It makes me feel a lot of hurt and bitterness here, like you're probably feeling also. I feel you could say a lot more and are controlling youself. Very good use of imagery and well expressed. |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Hummm...that is one relentless sun...loved the images and emotions here Temptress...very well done! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Temptress, I like the way your work is evolving, it's tighter, cleaner, more focused. Also like your new pic! Hope you are well! Cor |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this is powerful, sweet friend, I just love the way you ramble and always create such dazzling sybolism with the seasons, this is excellent! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jenn, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Stunning, just stunning! Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TemptyOne~ 'She's breathed the silence of an indiffernt moment' This line grabbed me and won't let go~ Powerfully magnetic~ Enjoyed the plunder of thoughts~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
There is no stupidity of your worth, sweet lady. You work is fabulous! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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