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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2002-03-23 06:41 AM

A Check on my Soul

Once more I open up the door
To look into my soul once more
To take a taste and stir the blend
To simmer to a proper end

The kettle bubbles oddities
With salt and pepper fantasies
Misting magic mediate
Cooking into ideate.

There seems no small ingredient
To make a soul expedient
For soul transcends the time of toll
And waits for you another whole

A single life but links a claim
To anchor down the solid aim
And nonsense turns to sense once more
For it to bloom forevermore

The flower that the soul can be
Forever in eternity

Marsha

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1 posted 2002-03-23 07:19 AM

Seymour darling boy Oh my I’m stunned with admiration this has got to be one of you utter utter best. Truly the line and form in this is absolutely excellent. I’m sitting here with my mouth making a silent oh of awe. This is really beautiful writing. YOU do KNOW I simply LOVE your writing don’t you?

I can actually feel the depth of this, this is utterly utterly wonderful. Truly awesome writing you are always a fabulous writer. Utterly utterly exquisite, maybe one day I suppose I’m gong to read your words and the magic connection between eye and heart will be gone. But not today and I hope not for a long long time, possibly that day will come when I start writing short replies. smile Absolutely perfect darling boy

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

Sunshine

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2 posted 2002-03-23 07:30 AM

From open door I smelled the brew
of Randy's cooking wholesome stew
I thought I would just take a peek
saw him standing, cutting leeks

and Sy? He's at his desk again
writing poems with inky pen...
a little moth with ink-tipped wings
softly flitters in soft sing

A single life but links a claim*
To anchor down with solid aim*
my life to yours for I would read
your poetry with eager greed

[*quoted from original]

Thanks for getting my muse kick-started and BEFORE the first cup of tea! Hugs to you!

Balladeer

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3 posted 2002-03-23 07:38 AM

Uh, would you like fries with that soul, Sy?

Keen write, mister Sy...enjoyed!

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-03-23 07:40 AM

Marsha,
As I said before your superlatives are magnificent. And I have become addictive to them. Thank you

Sunshine,
Thank you for the wonderful reply.

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2002-03-23 07:43 AM

Balladeer,
Yes as long as their not fried to long.
Thank you Mike.

strbbux
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6 posted 2002-03-23 09:21 AM

This is beautiful Seymour and again as I read it the words just roll on, great flow. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2002-03-23 09:23 AM

Thank you Floria,

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2002-03-23 09:26 AM

There seems no small ingredient
To make a soul expedient
For soul transcends the time of toll
And waits for you another whole

A single life but links a claim
To anchor down the solid aim
And nonsense turns to sense once more
For it to bloom forevermore
===========================================

could those verses be any cooler?????
me thinks not!!

Your poetry is me soul food ...
and always leaves me soul-full-filled.
*winkiewinkie*
heart and soul Stinky ... heart and soul

mothy me

Of all the things in me I could never be,
of the true I kept hidden from view,
the best parts of my heart ...
were the ones touched by you.

jm

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2002-03-23 09:35 AM

JM,
You are the purr I seek to hear
The whisper that is near my ear.
The color that the sky will sigh
The wind beneath the wings I fly.
Winkiewinkie Randy Stinky.

Martie

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10 posted 2002-03-23 10:25 AM

"A single life but links a claim
To anchor down the solid aim
And nonsense turns to sense once more
For it to bloom forevermore

The flower that the soul can be
Forever in eternity"

Wonderful, Sy!

Janet Marie
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11 posted 2002-03-23 10:27 AM

per your reply...
I just heard my sky *sigh*

Of all the things in me I could never be,
of the true I kept hidden from view,
the best parts of my heart ...
were the ones touched by you.

jm

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

12 posted 2002-03-23 11:08 AM

Martie,
Thank you for the wonderful.

JM,
Without a sigh the day would never end.

WW R S

Tracey
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13 posted 2002-03-23 11:18 AM

What a lovely peek into the doorway of your soul Sy. Great reflection, with perfect tempo too.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 2002-03-23 12:04 PM

I thank you dear Tracey.

Mistletoe Angel

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15 posted 2002-03-23 12:49 PM

(smiles) This is soooooo wonderfully delightful, sweet friend, I too feel that there is indeed much nonsense that we always feel but nonsense is what makes our dreams come true in believing in something extraordinary and when we spice it up to freality, it somehow becomes sense and that is the enchantment of life's ambitions! (big hugggssssss) Your words always make me smile, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shien upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Mysteria

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16 posted 2002-03-23 12:53 PM

I want to get this tattooed on my arm, with a little flower...
"The flower that the soul can be
Forever in eternity"...and I may just do that! Heck you only pass this way once right? Loved this one so much it may "hurt"!

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (03-23-2002 12:54 PM).]

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

17 posted 2002-03-23 01:39 PM

Noah,
Thank you for the wonderful comment.

Mysteria,
You don't need the tattoo, you are a flower.

Kiss:

Aimster
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Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

18 posted 2002-03-23 09:55 PM

sy,

this is one of the most awesome
poems my eyes has ever had the pleasure
of reading...your rhyme is totally
divine and your message wonderful...
you have an amazing talent friend!

take care.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

19 posted 2002-03-23 10:08 PM

Aimster,
A wonderful comment and I thank you.

ShadowRider
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20 posted 2002-03-23 10:23 PM

Seymour:
i am always in search of someone who knows how to say
a common feeling
but with uncommon words that still stir emotions
You did this sooo well. I wonder, tho, if the poem
wouldnt be better if the last two lines were to be omitted,
or at least, included somewhere inside of the poem....
either way, it's a winner!

tSR

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

21 posted 2002-03-23 10:30 PM

ShadowRider,
I was always the kind of kid that saved the best for last. What you say is true but it seems old habits never die. Thank you

Magnus

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22 posted 2002-03-23 10:56 PM

Yet another poetic masterpiece...love how
you cooked this one up...

Madame Chipmunk
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23 posted 2002-03-23 10:57 PM

The flower that the soul can be
Forever in eternity.

Beautiful writing, Sy....I hope you are right about the soul flowering in eternity.

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

24 posted 2002-03-24 07:29 AM

Magnus,
I humbly thank you.

Lyra,
Not to worry, you already are a flower.

Zinsser
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