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Sunshine

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0 posted 2002-03-22 09:02 PM

Someday you will paint my words

Like an artist’s rendering
a lovely line
will then lead
to exquisite scene,
a winsome lass
on a canvassed
green

In your artist’s
rendering

A cubist, nay,
you are not
but rather you would
featherly wrought
a raging sea
of blackish-blue
under sky
of grayish hue

Keen-line in a ship
so fine
through port-hole
Madeira wine
can be seen
if you peer
from the pier
as you stand
a far distance from
shore

With paintbrush
in artist’s hand

And if you were to paint my words

Then attempt to
affix me lone
to canvas light
in day’s sun bright
would you rather
find moonshine shone,
after a glass
or two
or three
of wine on lips
of thee…

Speaking these very words
so soft, so fine……..

~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

Do paint me then
in recline
with blessed eyes
of green
a large great smile,
a patina’d sheen,
and if you could
in tangled wise
leave a remember
of bedroom eyes

Oh, I do so love you,
thus, you see
when you attempt
to look at me
when my words
rhyme with “thee”
and when you smile
in my eyes
in the morning light of three…

But if you someday attempt
to paint my words

Is there a color that goes with

Unheard?

©Karilea Rilling Jungel
16 November 2000
Revised
22 March 2002

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (03-22-2002 09:19 PM).]

Midnitesun

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Gaia

1 posted 2002-03-22 09:11 PM

What a colorful intense portrait it would be! So many hues and contrasting views of the lady, brushed lightly, with tenderness.

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

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2 posted 2002-03-22 09:13 PM

Aw yes sweet sunshine, the whole rainbow.
I really liked this, a twist of old world with the undertones of the mardi gras!
ThisDiamond

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3 posted 2002-03-22 09:16 PM

This poem is a crystal goblet, so delicate one is almost afraid to touch it but so cool and delicious to the lips when touched...

in other words...I like it LOTS!!!

Mistletoe Angel

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4 posted 2002-03-22 09:21 PM

(smiles) YAY!!! Your words are always a grand fest of artistry, sweet friend, may you always continue to paint rainbows of poetic magic to us all and may all your loved ones always paint your words with the colors of lifes bliss! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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5 posted 2002-03-22 09:29 PM

And you've painted a lovely picture with this poem. Enjoyed.

Honeybee
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6 posted 2002-03-22 09:41 PM

This is fanastic writing! You just keep getting better and better, your muse and pen are gifted, indeed.....Publish!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

jwesley
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Spring, Texas

7 posted 2002-03-22 09:56 PM

Never - ever - unheard my friend. Such words are as these live forever....

jwesley

Magnus

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8 posted 2002-03-22 09:58 PM

Let me go get my brush, etc., etc.,....
and let's go for it!!

Love this poem...don't know what you revised,
but I do love it...

Madame Chipmunk
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9 posted 2002-03-22 10:02 PM

Karilea...you paint so very beautifully with your words.....
You are definitely an artist

lots of hugs!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Auguste

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By the sea

10 posted 2002-03-22 10:22 PM

Your description of the painting could easily be the one on my web site of a tall ship on a moonlit sea. Yes, I believe I could paint your words and I also know the hue of "unheard"

Fantastic writing!

Michael

Stars will shine when I am gone
Earth will spin on as before
Gulls still race along the shore
Morning star, still kiss the dawn

~ M. Auguste

vandana

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11 posted 2002-03-23 10:40 AM

enjoy your read

Tracey
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where insanity meets breeding

12 posted 2002-03-23 10:55 AM

Wow, this is amazing Karilea. Such beauty painted, then that zinger at the end. Really makes one stop and think, doesn’t it?

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Victoria

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13 posted 2002-03-23 11:12 AM

This is lovely sunshine..it makes me want to start taking art lessons...

Im only a painter of the mind..

~Victoria

"If music be the food of love, play on." (William Shakespeare)

Mysteria

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14 posted 2002-03-23 12:59 PM

Now you see I thought that was really sad. Sometimes I just plain read what it "feels" like to me, and that felt darn sad...but, I liked it

~* Reality is an illusion ~ albeit a persistant one *~
Albert Einstein

Ivy Rose
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15 posted 2002-03-23 03:24 PM

Sunshine...This is, indeed, a word painting of such beauty that I cannot convey how truly exquisite this poem is. EXCELLENT WORD PAINTING!!!! ***Ivy Rose

Sunshine

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16 posted 2002-03-24 08:36 AM

So many wonderful responses!

Midnitesun, your "colorful, intense portrait" tells me you really got into this poem...thank you very much!...

ThisDiamond, I had not looked at it in the MardiGras sense, but I am certainly glad you did!...

'Deer...I like crystal! In fact, I collect certain crystal objects...I am glad you drew that parallel...thank you!...

Noah, feast away! It is for readers like you that I enjoy writing so very much!...

Mirrorman, I am glad you enjoyed...thank you!...

Melybee...c'mon...you know Passions is the only place to put our work!  LOL...perhaps, someday....and thank you my dear, for your kind words!...

jwesley, you are too kind!...thank you for reading all the way to the bottom!...

Magnus, it was a tweak here and there...I'm getting better at tweaking...it doesn't hurt so much any more...thank you for reading!...

Chipmunk, perhaps only with words, but I do appreciate all styles of art...thank you my dear...

Auguste, I would like to see that ship...can you provide a link for all of us?...

Thank you Vandana...it's good to see you in here again!...

Tracey...aren't zingers fun?  thank you!...

Victoria...I know what a brush is, and I can tell the difference between oils and watercolors...the rest of my "artistic ability" is just simple appreciation that others have it!...

Mysteria, you are right...it is a sad piece, but only if one reads it all the way through, which you did...thank you my friend...

Ivy, your enthusiasm is showing!  Thank you!

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