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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Make me thy possession and I shall give to thee my passion Make me thy compulsion and I shall show thee my devotion Make my heart to know thee and I shall be truly free Make my soul in faith to see and my eyes shall behold eternity. Make thy handmaid thine and I shall drink only thy wine Make my love to ever shine and about thee my arms shall entwine. Make me all that thou desire and to affection sweet, aspire. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Very pretty Dulcie..nicely penned indeed  hugs..enjoyed~Victoria~
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Thanks Vicki! You know me...always the sonnet...though this one is not really one I like all that much...Thanks for the sweet reply I appreciate it!  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is well written. . . but, yes, it could use a little work. . . hmmmmm. . . the first verse is really all that you need to work with. . . let me take a look, and I'll get back to you. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Dulcinea, I love it just the way you've written it. ((Dulcinea)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Yep..need work  Ok..you anguished long enuff! This was puuuuuuuuurfect, Kitten! Jeff [This message has been edited by ShadowRider (03-22-2002 06:48 AM).] |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Thank you Sven, I appreciate anything you can come up with...though I think it is beyond help myself ((Newell))thank you for being TOO kind! You honestly are ya know! vandana, I am glad you enjoyed it, thank you! |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Dulcinea, love these lines. "Make thy handmaid thine and I shall drink only thy wine' beautifully done. floria Floria |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is such a beautifully breathtaking sonnet, sweet friend, may your love forever make you all you want to be and make you as happy as can be forever! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is gorgeous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dulcinea, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Really nice...James |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Darlin...told ya it needed work! ~~~awww...you are just sooooo adorable! ~~happy sigh~~ Floria, thank you so very much...there are a few good lines in there, and I tried to keep each stanza separte by ryhme...but Sven is right, that first one has just something not right about it...again, thank you! Noah, what can I say? I am so very sure my love will, as he always does, make me happy! Thank you sweet poet! (((hug))) James, thank you very much! [This message has been edited by Dulcinea (03-22-2002 08:49 AM).] |
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