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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2002-03-20 07:40 PM

Upon the hill of vale below
a brook of pure in crystal flow
Above the crest of mountain high
A slayer stands in watch of eye.

A man of steel, of blood and bone
a man of heart, and soul alone.
In search of Drag to fight and slay
each morning break, each dawning day.

A heart of gold for maid so fair
of auburn locks and softest hair
Of eyes so dark and mystic too
A beauty born in search of two.

A dragon’s eye does spy the maid
as from the lair dark wings are splayed
To swoop upon the beauty in flight
most certain to spurn on the fight.

A scream born of most outright fear
heard loud above all from far and near
The warrior rides into the gloom
in fear of loss and certain doom.

A steed and man spurred by beauty
in hectic flight of sworn duty
answer cries of maiden’s shrill voice
for damsel’s fight is by love’s choice

The lance thrown true finding the mark
as Drag does fall beyond the dark
Young maiden’s life again is spared
and ‘pon the steed love pure is shared.

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

1 posted 2002-03-20 07:48 PM

Magnus darling boy this is outstanding writing, as always you excel at whatever you write. Fabulous writing and this is so descriptive so vivid in its image of the knight the maiden the dragon and the landscape. Like a master painter you’ve sketched in the outlines and filled the canvas with vibrant life.

Utterly utterly wonderful writing YOU darling boy never disappoint. Wonderful absolutely perfect poetry

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-03-20 07:55 PM

BRAVO!!! Your beautiful words always bring the magic of pure love into perspective, dearest friend, this is a wonderful renaissance of passion and joy at its finest! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2002-03-20 07:57 PM

Love this Barry! There is something about a brave knight on his bold steed slaying dragons...just does something to me. Did you hear me yelling for help?! Great write!
Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2002-03-20 08:44 PM

SIGH...

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

5 posted 2002-03-20 09:19 PM

This is beautiful Magnus I like how you draw upon your imagination to write, I do that a lot and people are always thinking it is about me and most times it is not..this is truly a good, interesting read. Well written. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

6 posted 2002-03-20 09:27 PM

Probably one of the better romance poems of the Dark Ages I have seen in a while. Seems to me you have found your nitch...work it well, your blade will hang from it beautifully...

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

7 posted 2002-03-20 09:28 PM

Hello Barry

Such an enchanting story you have weaved for us here from your magical tapestry of words. Romance and adoration shines as I felt myself being swept back to a time long ago.
You do these type of poems so very well and they make me swoon every time.

Take care......Sue

Suetang

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2002-03-21 07:13 AM

Yes, this is just as good in the second read....well done, Barry...

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2002-03-21 03:03 PM

Magnus~
Some wonderful imagery in this flowing piece~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

10 posted 2002-03-21 03:32 PM

thou shalt not fear ..your maiden is here

although im not the one with the dark eyes ha..beautifully penned barry

~Victoria

"If music be the food of love, play on." (William Shakespeare)

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

11 posted 2002-03-21 06:20 PM

enjoyed the read

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