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Lance McLove
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0 posted 2002-03-20 11:12 AM


The Sun

It is a beautiful day
And it seems like the sun is calling out my name:
"Lance!  Lance!"
"Yes!" I reply.
"No," the Sun says, "Not you."
"Oh . . . Well, you did say Lance, right?"
"No, I'm sorry.  Excuse me.  I said Chance."
"Oh ok. It sounded like Lance when you called from far away."
"Yeah, I guess it could have."
"Yeah."
"Yeah.  Great, Well I gotta go." The sun disappears behind a cloud and I am left alone.
"Ok."
Well, it's still a beautiful day,
even if the sun is calling someone else.
Though . . . it was a little awkward.



© Copyright 2002 Lance McLove - All Rights Reserved
Krissy
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1 posted 2002-03-20 11:55 AM


Lance Hi there, this is excellent writing, I really do like the conversational quality to this. Well done very well written


Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

Pilgrimage
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2 posted 2002-03-20 01:05 PM


I love it! Awkward indeed, but it was still a beautiful day, so that's all right.

Nan

Ivy Rose
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3 posted 2002-03-20 01:42 PM


Interesting style!!!! I liked it very much...this conversation with the Sun.

***Ivy Rose

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4 posted 2002-03-20 01:46 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always bring sunshine to all our hearts! (sigh) This is a wonderful delightful conversation on a beautiful sun-shining day, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lance, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2002-03-27 12:21 PM


Interesting...James
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