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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Of 2000 words, of 2000 thousand rambles I have been both humbled and blessed To write and receive the complete Peace I feel when doing so I have complied 2000 words In fragments of time and music ~~~~~ How do I dance before I walk? Wait for me beside the sea Or in fields of orchids with Soft petals to caress my lips Watch the moon fade in silent harbors Of this weary soul In quiet times A butterfly pressed to glass Your still water drew me in I think of your softness, Now droplets of ancient time Still, in silence our foot prints Sketch the shadows In dust and sand Where elements Of life Haunt the moon In Whispers of reflection, In vibrant colors, In painted clouds In fall leaves dancing On roaring winds In clock towers That chime daily faces, In fragments of music strummed gently, Unreachable to my fingers yet, Touching the silent water In early dusk Consuming the brilliance Of sunsets golden streams and lavender hue When life was innocent And I call to you Come back, and listen Return to time Still Move closer Touch the water Remember I have loved you beyond time Stir it slowly You are part of it You live within my embrace Though You left time Fractured in a silver Streak that kisses The mist of meadows And whispers softly Upon flesh Once, only once In a life time you feel This way, did any one Remind you, what you Love, is beautiful? I stood next to you, And could hear songs From a haunted past Reveal pictures of light, Spiral blue in contrast, yet Across the raven land Butterflies dance the night as one As heaven welcomes the stars I still find you in the Black sky I am the tiny dancer Upon the waves The orchid kiss of Your lips The tremble of your heart I taste your tears raining Down in voice Of many waters I drink you in softly I bare myself To your touch Laying naked among My dreams in a Xanadu Of time to The gentle slide Beneath your skin So I am The snowflake Falling endlessly In fragments of time Step through the barrier of my mind, enter my soul, feel my desire, let my eyes guide you into the shadows of my heart [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-14-2002 12:24 PM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lauren, Stupendous! My goodness woman...what am I to say that could be adequate. Very impressive.  I just finished 2,000 but not like this. Congratulations.[This message has been edited by Larry C (02-14-2002 12:29 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OH MY!!! OH SIGH!!! Congrats on 2000 dear sister of my soul ... I'll be back   |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Lauren, the memories of your Love flow magically through these words. I hope you can wrap yourself tightly in these tender thoughts today, and they will keep you safe and warm. The depth of your love vibrates in every line. Soft and gentle hugs to you. (And thank you for the AM greeting card of soft velvety rose petals. It sweetened my morning.) XO,Kacy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Greeneyes, You used all the colors on a full palette. A wonderful word painting. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Congratulations on your 2000th post |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
 this is the perfect poem to celebrate your 2000th...Well done. I love it... HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Lauren, I think you just out did yourself here. This has more lovely imagery than any of your poems I've ever read. I'm keeping it. Congratulations on your 2000th post and Happy Valentines Day to you, dear friend. *hugs* Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Congratulations on 2000 and many more |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - I have no words to describe my feelings about this writing. I apologize for this, but it touched me deeply, and no words I can say would do this write the justice it deserves... I just love it.... BC [This message has been edited by Bill Charles (02-14-2002 03:06 PM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I remember your dancer her eyes first her laughter after slow touch green eyes |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have been a recipient of your responses, and am grateful to be among your 2000 posts. Congratulations. And on this lovely? Well done! |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is fantastic Lauren,,, "I still find you in the Black sky I am the tiny dancer Upon the waves" Wonderful poem , you write softly. I imagine your voice also as being soft. Love your work. floria OOPS. HAD TO COME BACK AND EDIT THIS TO SAY,,CONGRATULATIONS...... Floria "Alas for those that never sing, But die with all their music in them" (Oliver Wendell Holmes) [This message has been edited by strbbux (02-14-2002 04:52 PM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
 Congratulations on 2000 posts, Lauren...Now you have to make a wish and blow out the candles. There should have been 2000 of them on the cake, but I don't know how to do that. I really loved this beautiful and delicate poem. Still, in silence our foot prints Sketch the shadows In dust and sand Where elements Of life Haunt the moon This is so very lovely! copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Congratulations Lauren...a nice day to celebrate 2000:celebrate...happy valentines day too.. hugss ~Vic "Silence is a friend who |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR 2000th POST!! Lauren, this is by far, one of, if not the most exquisite pieces of writing I have seen here in Passions! THIS is breathtaking, and I feel as though I want to take a few moments to compose myself after devouring this work of art! Have a Happy Valentine's Day, Lauren! Into my library this goes! ~Smiles and Hugs, Nancy~ ~Love transcends time and space~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Greeneyes, after two thousand droplets of ecstasy your words still have the amazing power to move me. Congratulations on the 2000th post. And may there be many, many more. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am back and will be back many times... for this will need to be inhaled and exhaled many times.... yes....I recognize the "fragments" ... how could I not...each one was etched across my heart, engraved upon my soul. so many times as I read...I heard the echos...leaned in to hear the whispers...felt the wings brush my cheek. Now here, all together in one tapestry, woven with the devotion of time and threads of promise... thank you for the many replies to my work that make up some of this number...most of all thank you for the healing peace found in your words.  Some find subtlety in strangers, |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
Very enjoyable read. Nice writing. "What makes letting go hard isn't losing what you had, but losing the dream of what could have been." |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 YAY!!! Ooohhhhhhh...I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, THIS IS BEAUTIFUL!!! CONGRATULATIONS ON 2000, SWEET FRIEND, WE ALL LOVE YOU SO SO MUCH!!! (kiss on cheek) YAY!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
*bump*  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Greeneyes- Wow..this is absolutely beautiful...I love it. You are a wonderful writer. Congratulations on reaching 2000. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
ditto all that and more, the pictures you created in my mind were incredible! Congratulations on your "anniversary post", and I look forward to 2,000 more Lauren.
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I do love this one, excellent! We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles |
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Wanda Member
since 2001-10-23
Posts 461 |
Greeneyes; What a beautiful poem to celebrate your 2,000th. CONGRATS!! Wanda |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I am overwhelmed by the tender responses here....and wish to thank each of you for taking your time to read....and for also allowing me the 2000 words upon these pages....love to each of you....PEACE and thanks again... in all sincerity..... Lauren~ Step through the |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
*bump* |
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