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The Last Words....to Jane...
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The Last Words....to Jane... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Dear Jane... I don’t know that I can endure any longer... Painful thoughts have become me... I............I don’t want to write this...but.....I must...for me. I have felt us growing apart over the weeks... Unanswered calls, emails that are never answered... When we talk...we are always too busy... The time away is unbearable...I can’t...I can’t do it... I can’t live without you, while still loving you.. Our memories are priceless to me...So many thoughts shared.. As your lover, your best friend...I have learned much about you. I...know you better than....than I know me...scares me... We have shared so much of ourselves...unimaginable... Now...we share so little...our lives pull us apart.. I can’t bear you ever telling me goodbye.... Reading the last line of the letter...or the last word before the... the ominous click of a line going dead...the silence.. The ensuing days of nothing...nothing...nothing!!! I’m supposed to accept that...That we are no longer one.. And we were....We were so close in our minds, our feelings.. We knew what the other was thinking before ... before anything was ever said... Your eyes said so much to me...I could see your soul, your inner beauty through your eyes...So dark and mysterious... Your giggle, your laugh, your smile...all treasures...I shall keep them safe...within my heart, my mind...my soul...my existence.... I love you, love you dearly, terribly so...I ache without you.... But....I ache even more not knowing if I will have you in my life or not.. And this ache gnaws at my deepest part of me...I cannot endure this pain, I want to keep the warmth of you within me....I must put out this flame that is searing my heart... If you ever read this...you will know...and I hope you understand... I am trying to... I don’t know if I ever will... Goodbye Jane...This is my last goodbye... Jack |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Magnus, this makes me wish I was Jane when I had read this. Absolutely heartwrenchingly fabulous. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Magnus, this is soooo sad. I know how you feel here. Too much to get into but I swear I know. I hope you are ok though. I don't think you are. Please be well. Great write though it's sad.  Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...and this makes me glad I am not Jane.... even when fictionalized, the words are still difficult to write.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus, Take out the goodbye and send her the letter. Great write. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Barry, this is soooooo emotionally powerful, sweet friend, I am so happy this is fiction but it also saddens me to see so many relating to this experience and bid adieu to their lovers like this! (sigh) My heart goes out to all who have these feelings, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shien upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, you made this seem so real Barry. You have such a way with words, it’s like you can get right into the character you’re writing about. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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