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Softer Sunset
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Softer Sunset |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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The day ends in a softer sunset that is not quite so brilliant as were my yesterday's yet there comes a feeling of tranquility in the shadows at dusk as I collect my scattered thoughts piecing them back together so that I may rest in my tomorrow's and forgive myself for loving you too much in the only way I knew how.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Magical!!... ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) This is sooooooo wonderfully bittersweet, sweet friend, may you have the heart to forgive all of these emories and to embrace the new sunrise with hope and optimis! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so uch, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Sooo pretty....like I was there, seeing the beauty you describe! Well done. *s |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Enchantress~ Oh it was magical!! There were no more words needed than those you left for me. Thank you dear heart! Noah~ There is always a flicker that is left in the light of love, how could we ever forget!! Thank you~ Chanson~ I appreciate you seeing the beauty in my words as they were meant that way. Like the sun sets, so does it rise again. Thanks~ |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
as I collect my scattered thoughts piecing them back together so that I may rest in my tomorrow's and forgive myself for loving you too much in the only way I knew how...." this really touched me.....and went deep to a place I havent gone in a long time....for that I thank you..... Lauren~ Greeneyes~ |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This made me feel the calmness and acceptance of it. Love those last two lines. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi Lauren~ I can't tell you how much I appreciate you taking the time to let me know that my words have reached you...and for that I thank YOU! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Tracey~ I am calmed...for now! Hey I was going to say under Duncan's poem, about his one wish and how it must make her feel...go get em Tracey and make all his dreams come true!! Thanks for reading. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori Insight. The best gift to moving on. I don't know about you, but I call that progress! And stated in words of wisdom. It doesn't get much better than when said by a wise poet (that would be YOU!).  Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I've got two choices I can either wise up or wipe out...and the latter doesn't sound too swift, needless to say it's not part of my plan. And anyway, I want to be swift just like you!!! Thank you for being here Larry~ |
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Mark Coburn Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 71 |
blues serenade......let's cakewalk into town towards a softer sunset...you the words...me playing my blues harmonica...mark |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...to have loved one too much, is to have given it your best, after all, no matter how it turned out... you did your best... well done! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
yet there comes a feeling of tranquility in the shadows at dusk as I collect my scattered thoughts piecing them back together so that I may rest in my tomorrow's A beautiful piece, Lori...It reminds me of one I wrote some time ago. If I can find it, I'll try to post it soon. many huggsss!copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
this is one of the soft types of poems i can truly appreciate - for sentiment and delivery. yesterdays and tomorrows aren't what make up life, but they're what we often think of while today is happening. Chris |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
~sigh at LA~ velvety words from a satin-smiled lady Whoever is lucky enough to win your eternal heart, LA, has won a most treasured gift. I never EVER tire of your poetry, Lor. ~smile for me~ JF |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Umm what's a cakewalk? I know I've heard the word used before, it's just that I've never looked it up. I like the idea of your harmonica but believe me, you don't want to hear me sing! Thanks Mark~ Sunshine~ Sometimes our best isn't good enough but when you think about it, it's not our loss either. I kind of like that thought. Thank you for reading. Lyra~ It's so good to see you here, and I'm going to be looking for your poem. Thank you dear heart~ Christopher~ You're right tomorrow is already gone and yesterday won't come again someday. As much as we live for today don't we also live beyond it? IMHO, I think our life consists of all three. Thank you so much for your thoughtful reply. Shadowrider~ Jkf [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-18-2002 01:35 AM).] |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
A beautifully written, high impact piece with a positive message woven delicately throughout...very well done! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I love the way you have put this, Lori. Very soft tone but the determination shows through. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi Dulci~ High impact huh, I like the sound of that. Thank you for always leaving your kind words. I hope you're well. Dee~ Guess I am a softy at heart, and determined to make my own peace. It's nice to hear from you again, thanks~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Gee BS (hmmm, on second thought maybe I'd better not use your initials, huh...doesn't quite have the "twang" I meant...)so... GEE! Really have nothing to add to your words, or any words to touch you with that would be any more than what you've already said. I think it was perfectly stated and stands all by itself - kinda like you stood up and said "Well, here I am, in all I am...your loss!" Amen! jimmy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This says it perfectly. And after all, how can you love someone too much? Sandra |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
jimmy~ Oh gosh that was sure nice of you to say. I said something to that extent to Sunshine, we don't lose a part of ourself for giving it our best shot. Sure we might hurt but that doesn't change who we are. Does that make sense? Thank you dear Sir. Sandra~ How right you are, how does one love only part of the way. I guess there are some people who do, I'm just glad I'm not one of them. Thanks so much for reading. |
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