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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-03-14 05:55 PM

No simple melody played
For ears to enjoy without thought
But layered symphony of chords and dis
Blended over time’s pages
One note dropped here
And octave rose
Only to be lowered in bass reflection
Of the upper range we sang in youth

Voices crack
And wood loses its resonance
As age and misuse extract the depths

Still we can hear the past
Playing in repeat
No simple melodies
To think about

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

1 posted 2002-03-14 05:59 PM

Ron...I love the sound of "...as age and misuse extract the depths..." and the last verse is super. Well done. Bob

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2002-03-14 06:01 PM

Cpat Hair

"No simple melodies
To think about"

So true..well done, poet friend!

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

3 posted 2002-03-14 06:13 PM

as always your poetry stikes a chord with me........wonderfully done sir cpat

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-03-14 08:46 PM

Voices crack
And wood loses its resonance
As age and misuse extract the depths
===================================

I like the way you played this out...
From the title on, you worked the theme and metaphor to poetic perfection.
good to see you inspired again Capt.

You never knew what I loved in you,
I dont know what you loved in me ...
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be.

Jackson Browne

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-03-14 08:52 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is wonderful, sweet friend, your lovely words always speak with wisdom and feeling, may the chords of yesterday forever sbe strummed with the promises of tomorrow! (big hugggsssss) we all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2002-03-14 08:52 PM

chord and dis...
sonance
and hiss
agreement
deferred

Ok, ok so you got my mind working...brownie points for you!

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

7 posted 2002-03-15 10:20 AM

Beautiful...

~Tier

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

8 posted 2002-03-15 10:51 AM

good write

bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

9 posted 2002-03-15 11:45 AM

How nice to think of memories as music. lovely. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

10 posted 2002-03-15 03:16 PM

And the past plays on. Enjoyed this, Ron.
Sandra

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

11 posted 2002-03-16 06:52 PM

More points... You have a way of forcing me to read your work more than once... OK.. more than twice... or so..

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

12 posted 2002-03-17 08:41 PM

I'm with Nan on this one.... each time I pick up on more and more....
beautiful write Sir

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