Lurking in Shadows: Mondo Style Poem

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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2002-03-14 10:57 AM

Why do you stand there,
Lurking in shadows of night
Hiding from persons in day?
There is no hope here
Nothing to bring out the light
No one to share on my way.

Gloom

The Mondo is a Japanese style poem
that consists of two parts or two Katauta of 3 line of 19 syllables
where the first Katauta is the question,
the second is the response (usually an answer)
The Katauta is 5-7-7 where the rhythm of the two 7’s are similar in each part.
This is a form of the Sedoka style,
where the basic form is similar but does not require the question and answer or the similarity of the adjacent 7’s.

Sunshine

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1 posted 2002-03-14 11:20 AM

I shall study the Mondo, I think I could dance to it...

Silver Streak
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2 posted 2002-03-14 11:29 AM

Another great toy. O Boy!

Why am I happy
So full of sunshine, God's Way
I have neither fear nor pain.
I am full of hope
As Love shines all through my soul
For Jesus Christ made me whole.

((Gloom))
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Christopher

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3 posted 2002-03-14 11:49 AM

strange how mankind can develop so many different types of one thing... how many different poetic 'styles' are there anyway?

this was different. obviously i can't comment on the form, but i will say the brief monologue was interesting

Christopher

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4 posted 2002-03-14 11:49 AM

Gloom & Silver..... very nice : )

S Arthur Grey
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5 posted 2002-03-14 02:08 PM

Not familiar with this style.
Thanks for bringing it to our attention.

S Arthur

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trees tumble out of twigs and sticks;
e e cummings

Sven

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6 posted 2002-03-14 03:19 PM

I like the briefness of this. . . it would indeed be a challenge to many poets who seek the answers to those questions. . . that perhaps, they're using too many words. . .

well done. . . and thank you . . .

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Nightshade

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7 posted 2002-03-14 03:27 PM

Well done....I shall ponder this. Chris

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Munda
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8 posted 2002-03-14 04:32 PM

Oh goodie! Love to read new styles. Very interesting this one and - with the little knowldge I have about Japanes poetry - not as easily done as you make it seem. Great!

Mysteria

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9 posted 2002-03-14 04:57 PM

I liked the vision this poem put in my mind, and by the way, have you got the Japanese section up and running on your site yet? Very nice PG.

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10 posted 2002-03-14 05:01 PM

(smiles) WOW!!! Ooohhhhh...you've done it again, you always teach me something new each day it seems with your outstanding words! (big hugggsssss) I need to give this a try, it sounds like so much fun, we all love you so much, you are a delight to us all! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Aszard, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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11 posted 2002-03-14 05:57 PM

Thank you for the lesson gloom. another one to learn. and a very nice form. floria

Floria

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But die with all their music in them"
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Bridget Shenachie
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12 posted 2002-03-15 01:12 AM

Hey Gloom!

I really like your subject and this is the first time that I have encountered a mondo. I think this will be a perfect form for those rare occasions when I find answers to my questions.

Thanks for the lesson!

Shenachie

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13 posted 2002-03-15 01:14 AM

Geeze! I'm not even done working on the choka and now you introduce me to another new style? *grins* You're craaazy! And talented!

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

Professor Gloom
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14 posted 2002-03-15 07:33 AM

Thank you, Sunshine,
I’m sure you can easily dance to your inner harmonies

Thank you, Silver Streak,
Very nice response in poetic kind,
Classical form of this style would mean that the
2,3 lines should be close in meter i.e. rhythm
as should the 5,6
without the close rhythm it is a Sedoka even though a question/answer.

Thank you, Christopher,
Yes, sort of like the variations of faces in a crowd.

Thank you, Zinsser,
Glad you liked, Silver Streak is kind to add his talent of words

Thank you, S Arthur Grey,
Just another style to express, Glad you liked it enough to comment

Thank you, Sven,
Pleased you enjoyed,
I tend toward the briefer styles,
There is one that goes for 100 lines and another for 1000,
I think that might be a little too much for posting her.

Thank you, Nightshade,
Glad you liked, ponder on.

Thank you, Munda,
By trying things, we expand ourselves.

Thank you, Mysteria,
I have yet to fix my Chinese Poetry section
Much less get the Japanese Poetry section put together,
I’ve gotten a bit slower in my old age and my talents are a great as some
When it comes to site work,
Pleased you enjoyed this bit.

Thank you, Mistletoe Angel,
Glad to impart the knowledge, with your great emotion
It can easily be another means for your lovely expression.

Thank you, Strbbux,
Does this mean you’ll be writing one soon?

Thank you, Bridget Shenachie,
There is a variation of this where it’s two voices
One asking the question, another responding.
Perhaps if you asked, someone else might have the answer,

Thank you, Skyfire,
That has been pointed out to me several times before
But I think I’m sane, at least at the moment,
Keep working, I’ve still a few more styles left to share.

Gloom

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