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Martie

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California

0 posted 2002-03-14 10:08 AM

Into The Warm

Can you feel me slip inside
just a graze of hair on cheek
to touch so much the wounded parts
with dappled light from words impart
to kiss the broken doubt so that
the pieces fall and are pulled out
by breeze I made with beating heart
to still the ache that pulls apart

I know the shoulder of this place
its fragile keep is naked now
the place is mine as well as yours
and captures moments to insure
the sound so close of sugared breath
that melts then bends the will that built
years of walls around the warm
to keep the heat soft nestled safe

now like a whisper to candle flame
we blow out doubt to opening

[This message has been edited by Martie (03-15-2002 09:04 PM).]

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2002-03-14 10:12 AM

MartieSis~

'I know the shoulder of this place'

And YOURS is the shoulder of friendship in abundance~
Love this piece of you~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-03-14 10:14 AM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, such warmth always shines from your heart and glows in your words! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is lovely! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-03-14 10:15 AM

I like the mix of internal rhythm/rhyme with the freeness of the verse...this works very well for me and makes me slow down to take it all in...

Like warm honey....

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2002-03-14 10:20 AM

enjoyed

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

5 posted 2002-03-14 02:46 PM

I agree with Karilea. You've done well here, Martie. Very well!

Stars will shine when I am gone
Earth will spin on as before
Gulls still race along the shore
Morning star, still kiss the dawn

~ M. Auguste

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

6 posted 2002-03-14 02:49 PM

now like a whisper to candle flame
we blow out doubt to opening
Wonderful Martie. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

7 posted 2002-03-14 08:04 PM

the pieces fall and are pulled out
by breeze I made with beating heart
to still the ache that pulls apart

I know the shoulder of this place
its fragile keep is naked now
====================================

*shaking my head and smiling*

You know Im loving every word of this...
just look at you...the poetess who once told me rhyme intimidated you..and now you are whispering it in your dreams...
rhyme divine baby.....
DIVINE ...
now my muse has really got something to worry about

You never knew what I loved in you,
I dont know what you loved in me ...
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be.

Jackson Browne

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

8 posted 2002-03-14 09:45 PM

Really well done Marty.
The way that you wrote this, the unbroken chain...I love that. ThisDiamond

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-03-14 09:52 PM

Martie...this is very very special.
My I wish I could write like you!!

Beautifully penned poetess.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

10 posted 2002-03-14 09:56 PM

Martie,
Another delightful read. Wonderful

mirror man
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since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

11 posted 2002-03-15 05:14 PM

I like this. It is well structured and very...warm, just as you say. A nice place to crawl into, metaphorically.

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

12 posted 2002-03-15 05:24 PM

i love this Martie, I would recognize your poetry anywhere. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

13 posted 2002-03-15 06:06 PM

martie,

what an incredible write...your flow
and ryhthm in this near perfection...
just a breathtaking piece of poetry my
friend...beautiful!

take care.
amy

"just because someone doesn't love you as you'd like them to, does not mean they don't love you with all their heart"

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