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Eye-Dropped
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Eye-Dropped ever hear with your eyes? or see with your touch? or feel with your sense of smell? they did all that, one to the other, while I eye-dropped them yes, the word should be “eavesdrop” but they said not a word or I would have heard, so I could only see all that was left unsaid quite by accident for she only saw him he only saw her she had turned a corner he held his post, standing, watched her approach under his gaze, her stride became more purposeful his stanch became more virtuous but his eyes gave her away and her eyes gave him stay the distance, abridged the electric, sparked the greeting became a quantum theory their light blinded only me as I eye-dropped on what God had put together she raised her hand touched his arm then all became right in their world I would have eavesdropped to hear what transpires between a perfect union of touch but I was already blinded by an absolute and I beheld green knew envy’s twine, when envy left I realized the sound of chime so then, in this world, there does reside a place where hope breathes and love encircles someday, I would want a reason for someone to eye-drop me. A repost for a friend... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Love the style of this...love the poem... very very nicely done....don't we all wish we could be eyedropped..... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
but his eyes gave her away and her eyes gave him stay ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Lady, ask me how much I love this! Wow! Eye-dropped...love the usage of the word here. This is very special...a keeper for sure. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I can see that you too have what it takes to invent and go with associations, well done! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Ooohhhhhhhh...this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I know your friend will always cherish this so much just as you always eye-drop love from your heart through your touching words! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is just breathtaking!!! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, the next time eye dew drop by, aye'll drop ewe a line  Is nothing sacred? This is a breathtakingly stunning poem and I'm making fun..  Anyone would be able to see a good future by eye-dropping you, Lady....that better? [This message has been edited by Balladeer (03-13-2002 10:44 PM).] |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Excellent! |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Eye-dropped in to read your wonderful work.. Does that mean you've been eye-dropped??...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lady In White, This is an excellent write, loved it. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Lady darling girl this is outstanding writing, so utterly real, the flow is perfect, utterly divine. Your ache of envy in this is so clear, I can feel it throbbing through your words darling girl. And that phrase Eye dropped…… is soooo beautiful Do I love this poem? You KNOW I do. Perfect writing darling girl utterly perfect    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
someday, I would want a reason for someone to eye-drop me. ME TOO!!!! I love this one and am glad you shared it hugsss M (and Lady Ollyne too) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
but his eyes gave her away and her eyes gave him stay ======================================= Lady ... mine eyes are grateful to have witnessed this. yes...breathtaking.... my brown eyes are now green (IWIHWT)You never knew what I loved in you, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know I look at my son looking at his wife, and she at him, and no words pass, but there is a whole lot of conversation going on, and it pleases me that they can communicate with this much love in a look after 12 years. Eyedropping is a wonderful way to put it Lady in White, and I shall show her this poem tonight and I bet she will lend it a smile, as did I. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this, Lady... it's exquisite. *S* Can I tack my "me, too" onto the ending? *S* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Eye-Dropped....I LOVE IT. Absolutely perfect usage and delightful write! On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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