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Open Poetry #19

Going Deaf (Communication Breakdown Challenge)

Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

0 posted 2002-03-13 03:24 PM

Courtesy avoids
groping hearts
lash out blindly
and
defense
takes over purpose
egos build warrior walls
around overprotected fires
shoulders go dark and cool
as heads
meant for face to face bodies
rest in hands instead.
wounded tongues sharpen their swords
on glowering stones of competition.
Communication breakdown
stalking hand in hand prey
sinister triumph of an old enemy
less brittle souls
have quivered beneath its touch.

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

1 posted 2002-03-13 03:35 PM

Siofra,

This is definitely a communication breakdown. Sounds like you have firsthand experience. At least, that's my guess. Challenge very well met.

Michael

Stars will shine when I am gone
Earth will spin on as before
Gulls still race along the shore
Morning star, still kiss the dawn

~ M. Auguste

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2002-03-13 03:47 PM

A powerful write for such a "little person."

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

3 posted 2002-03-13 04:17 PM

Micheal,
perhaps..

thanks for reading.

Interloper,

When small warriors
unsheath their swords for trouble
mouths drop in silence

hmm...just the fighter in me bragging, Sir. She's just as tough as any brutish man.

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

[This message has been edited by Siofra (03-13-2002 04:19 PM).]

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

4 posted 2002-03-13 04:59 PM

Hey Girly

I'd say you've earned an A+ on the challenge

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2002-03-13 05:01 PM

a total breakdown indeed. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-03-13 05:03 PM

BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is a wonderful reply to the challenge, sweet friend, kudos to you, this is powerfully expressive! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Siofra, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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