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Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2002-03-13 03:06 PM

I remember the watch I sent you
across an ocean of miles
I hoped you would think of me
whenever you looked at the time
each tick you heard
was my heart beating
beating with love for you

Although it's been a while
since I first sent the Christmas gift
and time has ticked by
I still think of that watch
around that masculine wrist of yours
and I want to slide my fingers
through the sun blonde hair on your arms
gliding my fingertips over your bare shoulders
with the destination of your soft lips

I wonder if that steamy water from the bathtub
evaporated beneath the crystal?
the watch was the last thing you had in mind
when you held me in your arms
for the first time

"Mistakes are the portals of discovery."
-- James Joyce

[This message has been edited by Victoria (03-13-2002 06:52 PM).]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-03-13 03:09 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful with a small tinge of sadness, sweet friend, may your heart forever be embraced with his and may your hearts forever beat together in loves joys forever and ever by every ticking of a clock! (kiss onc heek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, your words are always timeless in beauty! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Victoria, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

2 posted 2002-03-13 03:10 PM

Now that was a timeless write

I loved the premise and the story.
Fabulous finale

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2002-03-13 03:12 PM

Okay I am getting a "huge" supply of those $10.00 watches, and will let you know what happens LOL

If it worked for you, one never knows it might work for me? Great write Victoria.

The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives.
~* Albert Einstein *~

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2002-03-13 03:13 PM

Victoria~
Got me *sighhhhhhhing* so early in the day ~
Love it !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

5 posted 2002-03-13 03:29 PM

noah..thank you sweetheart..hugss

interloper..thank you..im glad you enjoyed..

yes timeless love indeed

sharon..you are too funny..i have the same idea in mind ha..hugs

thanks marge..im still sighing too

hugs

ShadowRider
Senior Member

since 2001-07-14

Posts 1038
USA

6 posted 2002-03-13 03:34 PM

Sweet Vic....geez, gal....you do know how to instill that feeling into the reader.
Such a difficult thing to do:  describe feelings with enough passion to impact
another's feelings.  You do it....so well in fact.  Sighing at the 'gifts left behind'.
Another sigh....
Well, before I headed out on multiple errands, wanted to say i enjoy your
writing so.

Find a Wishing Star, sweetheart....make the Forever wish.
In hopes they may come true for you....
jeff

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

7 posted 2002-03-13 04:52 PM

thank you jeff...very kind of you to say..hugss..glad you enjoy my words

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

8 posted 2002-03-13 04:57 PM

Oh, well done, you do know how to reach my heart. Timeless love, I like that. I hope he cannot forget the best thing he ever had.
Sandra

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

9 posted 2002-03-13 05:12 PM

~V~

Very nicely put....a wonderful memory of time....I love this!!

Lauren~

Greeneyes~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

10 posted 2002-03-13 05:30 PM

thank you sandra and lauren..nice to hear from you both.. hugss...

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

11 posted 2002-03-13 06:10 PM

Victoria, a timeless piece here, lovely and romantic. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

12 posted 2002-03-13 06:33 PM

liked it

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

13 posted 2002-03-13 08:06 PM

Sounds like more was steaming thank just water.

LOL! Very nice, Victoria. *hugs*

Michael

Stars will shine when I am gone
Earth will spin on as before
Gulls still race along the shore
Morning star, still kiss the dawn

~ M. Auguste

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

14 posted 2002-03-13 10:10 PM

floria..thank you for peeking in hon hugss

vandana..nice to hear from you as always hugs

michael..

hugs

GenXer
Senior Member

since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

15 posted 2002-03-13 11:57 PM

Victoria - Really liked this one. The last stanza was great, hoping that time stood still, that it wasn't important. Yet when you are apart all you can do is count the seconds. Nicely done.

Dave

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

16 posted 2002-03-14 11:30 AM

thank you dave..yes dont we wish time could stop sometimes ...but sometimes it ticks by a little too fast...like its on fast forward

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