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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA 
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Mist Memories so hazy Drift through my mind Things that you did Things that I can’t forgive I try to remember But all I can see Is a veil of mist Clinging beads of shadows That change and move Dark and deceitful I wander through silently Frightened and so alone Knowing only I can exist here With the haunting memories Images that replay unfinished Like a broken movie reel
"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" - Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (03-12-2002 11:02 PM).] |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Tara - You can really feel the fright and the feeling of betrayal in this write. Well done. By the way, first stanza has a typo, s/b can in the 6th line. Dave |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Dave -  Thank you for letting me know about the typo, I re-read it 3 times before I posted. I still missed it! And thank you for stopping in. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Oh Tara, this is indeed a sad poem, but I think it is alright here! (kiss on cheek) My heart goes out to you, sweet friend, may loves joys come singing to your heart and give you sweet memories forever! We all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tara, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sometimes that mist is there to help us...nicely written, Tara ....and thanks for your tiptoe through the archives...my old poems appreciate your eyes  |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Noah - Thank you my friend  Balladeer - The mist can help, in the beginning. Eventually it becomes blinding and suffocating. Thank you for reading. And you're welcome, I love reading your work [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (03-12-2002 11:09 PM).] |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
sometimes the mist can help sometimes the mist hides truth sometimes the truth blazes, trying to burn its way free crawling up from haze crawling up from dark sometimes truth is more important than sparing our feelings. i love you, honey. and i am always here to help you carry those memories, and maybe lay some of them to rest. -Dave |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Aw, Tara... so great! You're so great! I love it! I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Tara- your writing is superb! i really loved the depth of emotion you put into this... i could FEEL your words on the page like leap out on me, really getting my attention. just a wonderful write! take care amy p.s. i noticed that your boyfriend Dave lives in Texas...and just wanted to let you know my partner too lives in Texas and I in North Carolina...Isn't the long distance hard? Write me sometime if you like. "Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Dave - Thank you for your support. There is way words can say how much I appreciate the man you are. I love you Skyfire - Listen to you! *chuckles* I'm glad you liked Amy - Thank you for your kind words And yes, long distance is VERY hard at times, and yes, I will email you |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Tara, this is so very sad. Know that I wish you my best. (((hugs))) Michael Stars will shine when I am gone |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Tara~ sadly written...I wish you peace.... Lauren~ Greeneyes~ |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
WONDERFUL EXPRESSION!!!! This poem soars!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Michael - I know, and thank you so much. Lauren - Thank you Ivy Rose - I love that name. Thank you for stopping in. |
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