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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869
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She danced a slow waltz with him in his arms of not meant to be she melted like M&M's in warmth of his hands tasting the flavor of ecstasy They thought love was a candy bar unwrapping faithfully salivating for a while upon moistened lips savoring morsels of melting destiny He made her feel like a Godiva chocolate juicy raspberry sensations lost upon a shelf behind the double bubble on sale for a dime a dozen "Mistakes are the portals of discovery." -- James Joyce [This message has been edited by Victoria (03-12-2002 06:11 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Victoria, this is sooooooo beautifully bittersweet, dearest friend, it too always saddens me to see so many lovelorn souls who love someone so much while the other makes their hopes turn sour in return! (kiss on cheek) This is sad but very beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have sucha beautiful heart, sweet Victoria, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I really enjoyed reading this poem although I didn't expect the ending to be honest. It is a wonderful if not a little sad read and thank you for sharing it with us.  Andrew"The pin didn't drop it came and crashed down" |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Victoria, well now, this is a sweet, little offering to contemplate while I munch on my M&M Speckled mini Eggs. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Excellent use of theme, images and metaphors. Well expressed! Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Victoria~You make me smile! Enjoyed this one...now, where's my chocolate? Delectable! Hugs, Nancy. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
a smile maker not to mention excellent work vic. Hugs to you. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
He made her feel like a Godiva chocolate juicy raspberry sensations lost upon a shelf behind the double bubble on sale for a dime a dozen no! No! NO! Godiva chocolates are never a dime a dozen. They are the best! Like you! ((Victoria)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
noah..yes for a man you are very smart hugs andrew..thank you im glad i surprised you ha chris..glad you enjoyed this with your mini eggs. you are eating them early arent you? ha melissa..thank you for peeking in hon hugs nancy..thank you..glad i made you smile..but you dont look so good with that chocolate on your teeth ha donna..thank you so much..glad you enjoyed hon hugss newell..thank you..but its the double bubble thats on sale ha.. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Vic....you know that I enjoy when you write like this...you do it so well!! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
thank you barry...nice to know you enjoy my words..hugs |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Victoria - Really liked your use of metaphors in this. It is a shame when love is one sided and it leads to that person getting hurt. Very good. By the way, you know you incorporate food into your writes very well. Your like a chef poet.lol  Dave |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
that is funny dave..a chef poet haa..a good laugh before i turn in for the night.. Chef Victoria ha.. |
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