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Of Butterfly and Baseball
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Of Butterfly and Baseball |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Of Butterfly and Baseball It was just a dream yet I think that it was more how else explain the way it wrote the words across the sky I slept with where a butterfly is fragile taken into the whim of restless air where her delicate fell in love with a baseball with purpose sure they touched in air pulled by destiny’s bullet her fabric caught in the sureness of a fastball going home across the field of time and the end is up to you for all I felt was the twirl of destiny that still waits the catch They say we always wake up when falling before the final crash through the door and in that swirl of time lit magic dream the important part for me was the dance |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh I loved this part... "and in that swirl of time lit magic dream the important part for me was the dance" Well done dreamer girl! The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
They say we always wake up when falling before the final crash through the door and in that swirl of time lit magic dream the important part for me was the dance ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ WoW! This is wonderful Martie...!! A beautiful afternoon read as we dance through life... ~Hugs sweet lady....Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Ah.....baseball....Sigh. Oh, and a butterfly, that too. Smiling. Bob |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, I'll be back to read this again, and again, and one more time... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
and the end is up to you for all I felt was the twirl of destiny that still waits the catch They say we always wake up when falling before the final crash through the door and in that swirl of time lit magic dream the important part for me was the dance I think I know how a fastball feels just after the bat connects... the wind whipping my face until I hang suspended for a long priceless moment before realizing the flight will soon end. For in reading your words I'm transported... flung free from this cubicle and into a Martie-seen world... and the last words bring a wish for another ride. *S* This is incredible, Martie... and I've no doubt whatsoever that she hitched a ride on that speeding bullet and hopped off gracefully just before the ground grabbed the ball. *S* Thank you for this dance. *S* [This message has been edited by suthern (03-12-2002 02:30 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"They say we always wake up when falling before the final crash through the door and in that swirl of time lit magic dream the important part for me was the dance"   (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, yep, spring fever is going around and soon baseball is on again! YAY!!! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
This is nice, Martie. Michael Stars will shine when I am gone |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSis~ 'how else explain the way it wrote the words across the sky I slept with' 'HOW ELSE' indeed ! Just when I think I've got your fastball figured out ... you throw a curve~  Fantas-martie-gorical !  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is an absoloutely wonderful read, I just fell in love with the imagery and the language you have used. Thank you for sharing it with us. Andrew "The pin didn't drop it came and crashed down" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
how else explain the way it wrote the words across the sky I slept with where a butterfly is fragile taken into the whim of restless air where her delicate fell in love ============================== *sigh* you knew I would love this one right? Now...what did you eat before bed to make you dream like this???? Pop Corn....Peanuts...Cracker Jacks?? LOL yer soooo kewl  You never knew what I loved in you, I dont know what you loved in me ... Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be. Jackson Browne [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (03-12-2002 09:40 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Whether the butterfly hits the ball or the ball hits the butterfly it's normally too bad for the butterfly!  Love the thought behind this one, Martie. It's not the end, but the journey to the end that's important..the end is normally a bummer  |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I enjoyed your message in this. This is extremely well written with clever metaphors and images! And, I'll say it again, I love to see the world through your eyes Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Yes, I like this too. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You always give me a magic ride with your poetry. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You threw me a curve with your finale I loved it, as usual |
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