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The Last I Love You
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The Last I Love You |
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John Yaws Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 860Texas 
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Our communications, have broken down it seems- You wish to dwell in darkness, with regrets and broken dreams. There’s nothing I could offer, that you could call your own- Perhaps you’re realistic, and we’d best go on alone. I guess that it was foolish, to think that things could change- You cannot change the pattern, that kismet does arrange... Our hands will never twine in love, as we walk in the night- No dawn will gently bathe our figures in it’s gentle light... Lonely is, will always be, the portion of our lives- We live, we love, we die alone, and only pain survives. So ere I lay my pen aside, I’ll tell you what I’ll do- I’ll one again peruse your face, write one more, “I love You”. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is both sad and beautiful  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
*smiling through tears...* ~Sometimes all you really wish for... |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Been there done that, and in the middle of that.. Good write Bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) This is so sa dbut beautiful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and the loneliness you feel! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderfully sensitive! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet John, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh I love it... it's so sad and sweet. *hugs* Thanks for the read! I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers. |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
I like how the writing once more gives the feeling that while you'll respect her wishes, you'll never give up on her. I liked the consistent use of couplets as well as steady meter. Definetly a good piece. |
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amigo Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 520the earth school |
nice write here, my friend, and keep 'em coming...i feel it's only in dictionary that 'gain' comes before 'pain'.... |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* it took a while for the tears to stop so that I could tell you that this heartfelt poem touched me deeply...**big big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
This is sooooo sad. I love it. You really touched that spot in my heart. "The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince |
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