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Communication Breakdown
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Communication Breakdown |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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There is of necessity light and dark Sunshine followed by miserable rain There is resounding joy and blindness stark And communication breakdown again You speak of joy in love I talk of lust Whenever we're together we're apart You tell me stories that will win my trust But you will never, never win my heart You say the shadows reach to catch my mind I say I'm trapped within my turmoiled past You bid me leave and better future find I say I like the dark, will make it last You say why not see rainbows in the rain I say us speaking breaks me down again [This message has been edited by Kethry (03-11-2002 04:09 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I say I like the dark, will make it last You say why not see rainbows in the rain I say us speaking breaks down again ===================================== the yin and yang of it all... dont know what the challenge was...but I dig the response you wrote. very cool Kethry girl...sometimes we make more sense when we rhyme. Talk is overated anyway  Awake again I can't pretend ... and I know I'm alone ... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Kethry, this sounds so very sad, I hope this loss of communication doesn't apply to your feelings now, I think there are may that can relate to this heartache! (sad sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is sad but powerfully expressed! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing!    May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Kethry, I'm not sure why, but this "You speak of joy in love I talk of lust Whenever we're together we're apart You tell me stories that will win my trust But you will never, never win my heart" spoke to me...I like this very much |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Communication is soooo important - Nicely said, Kethry... and a sonnet to boot... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I really like the thought behind this poem and the comparison you made to reach the ending, Keth... ...and if he won't talk lust to you, call me at BR-549! |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
"You speak of joy in love I talk of lust Whenever we're together we're apart You tell me stories that will win my trust But you will never, never win my heart" You touched my heart with this one. I know how this feels. This part speaks of how I feel. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Kethp my favourite auntie, how long did it take you to write this? Mum says it was hardly any time at all, just while she was on the phone. Well, don’t tell mum I told you but this is much better than hers, honestly! I think I might have a stab at it, I don’t think it will be as good as this but I will have a try. I think It is very very good   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
You say the shadows reach to catch my mind I say I'm trapped within my turmoiled past You say why not see rainbows in the rain I say us speaking breaks me down again KethrySweetie, gosh your poem struck a chord 2day in me and I compliment you PoetFriend on a terrific write I found 2day that you have penned... It's been some time that I've replied2a poem you have wrote and this morning with cafe in hand this one really really touched my heart and I thank you Sweetie for this read cuz I really enjoyed it Hugs2uAlways *~coco~* |
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