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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2002-03-10 09:16 AM

The Very Best

What might I converge with
                                              this
how best to articulate
                                                     that
gist ~

it is not that I would want a tear to fall

but                    feel the ache

go slowly across the page
                                              as if brailled,

                         to locate

that phenomenon
                                     called heartache

for I would have you share
it just the once
just the once
just once

so that in the reality
                               of its aftermath

that sweeter you would know the

love

I
have
for
you.

                                                                                                ©Karilea Rilling Jungel
                                                                                                       10 March 2002

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

1 posted 2002-03-10 09:32 AM

YOWSA!
~
What a picture!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-03-10 09:36 AM

Karilea, there are times when you astound me! This being one of them. This is exquisite, and oh how I enjoyed it with my morning cup. Wonderful!
~Morning hugs, Nancy~

~Sometimes all you really wish for...
is someone to wish for you.~

[This message has been edited by Enchantress (03-10-2002 09:38 AM).]

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

3 posted 2002-03-10 09:41 AM

Karilea, this is most beautiful and the style adds to it. Lovely and creative. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-03-10 09:58 AM

it is not that I would want a tear to fall

but                    feel the ache

go slowly across the page
                                              as if brailled,

                         to locate

that phenomenon
                                     called heartache

for I would have you share
it just the once
just the once
just once

so that in the reality
================================

Does it ever turn off in you?
Inspiration? is there ever a time it isnt flowing thru you?
Silly question moth girl!!
does the suns rays ever turn off the warm?
I think not

(IWIHWT)

Awake again I can't pretend ... and I know I'm alone ...
And so close to the end of the feelings we've known.

~Jackson Browne~

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2002-03-10 10:15 AM

Karilea

This form so adds to the words..it was like looking at the ache. Wonderfully done, my dear!

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

6 posted 2002-03-10 10:31 AM

Heartache shared. Does make the flip side all the sweeter. I really like the way you did this, Sunshine.

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

7 posted 2002-03-10 10:56 AM

Love is.... Sunshine within...

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2002-03-10 11:01 AM

enjoyed

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-03-10 11:05 AM

(sigh) Oh Sunshine, I couldn't agree with you more, I nfeel that in order to make something feel so magical when we fall in love is to first feel the sorrow like I have been feeling lately and if two can endure the yearning, then the love is real! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous form and writing! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

10 posted 2002-03-10 11:14 AM

Kari darling sister of my heart OH MY!! This is exquisite writing the flow divine, the ache transmuted into a living thing, never has this been written better.

Wonderful darling heart utterly utterly wonderful writing

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

11 posted 2002-03-10 02:41 PM

Wow Sunshine! Tis is fantastic. I love it.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

12 posted 2002-03-10 03:14 PM

Never turns off because the poems write her

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

13 posted 2002-03-10 03:22 PM

*wow* love the presentation

great work!

Charisma

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

14 posted 2002-03-10 03:25 PM

Lovely - the words drift down the page. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

15 posted 2002-03-10 08:05 PM

This is so unbelievably awesome, Karilea,
that I don't think words do it justice.
This poem isn't just words...its the whole way that you drifted them down the page.
Unbelievably beautiful and creative.

((hugs))

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

16 posted 2002-03-10 08:10 PM

Wow - I love this! It's true, words cannot praise your poem enough! Well expressed sunshiny one.
I've been a fan of yours from day one, but lately your poems are just awesome and at their 'very best'!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

17 posted 2002-03-10 08:17 PM

....touching...

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