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A Mothers Love
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A Mothers Love |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859
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( retourne- a variation of the kyrielle-- repetition of lines and last verse is reversal of first verse.) A Mothers Love A mothers work is never done. Her day begins at rise of sun. There is no time for her to play. Till dark of night is on its way. Her day begins at rise of sun. And does not stop till all is done. She works for love of family. A mothers love so pure and free. There is no time for her to play. She does not waste her time away. She's dedicated as can be. And cherished by her family. Till dark of night is on its way. There is notime for her to play. Her day begins at rise of sun. A mothers work is never done. Floria Kelderhouse |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I'll take your word for it...thanks, Floria. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A new twist to learn... thanks for this, Floria... something new from you! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I enjoyed how you put this poem together... very nice....Will have to give this a try.. Thanx Floria...and you are right...A Mother's work is never done.... |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
floria, That's how I recall it. Exhausting just to think about. Thanks for a reminder of how much I appreciate my mother and the mothers of our children! Nice technique and poetry.  |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Yes so true Floria and i loved every minute of it..all the dirty laundry too ha..nicely done..i miss kissing their tears when they would fall and cut their little knees...hugss ~Vic |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Floria, You surprised me, well done. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) WOW, OH MY GOSH, I NVER HEARD OF THIS FORM BEFORE!!! (BIG HUGGGSSSSS) I need to try one of these, these sound like so much fun! (kiss on cheek) Your son will always be so lucky to have such a loving mother like you in his heart, sweet friend, God Bless You, this brought a tear to my eye, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Floria, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Floria Hi there this is really well written and so original I like it a lot. You are a good writer a very good writer this poem says it all for me mums work very hard I like this, I could do with this it’s Mothering Sunday tomorrow here in England and Mum would love a poem. Not one of my poems, she likes rhyme   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Floria - What a great poem about Mom's. Really liked the format as well. I know I love and respect my Mom very much. Actually, I am glad I am a guy because I am too lazy to be a Mom.lol Dave |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is the perfect poem for that style, Floria, because "a mother's work is never done" and it literally goes round and round like that, just like your poem does. I have never heard of that style before but it reminds me of a villanelle. I loved the poem.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is so true. |
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Keith Morgan Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 114Md |
I think I appreciate my mom a little more after reading this. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece. Write from the soul and the words will flow |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed your work Floria...James |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Really enjoyed this strbbux, it's a nice form. A fresh weaving dealing with an old adage. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Thank you all very much, I always look forward to your replies which encourages me to continue to learn and write, I have not been on the blue pages as my mother in law had to have angioplasty surgery,She is fine now. It lifts my spirits to see your replies to me and I thank you so much. floria Floria "Alas for those that never sing, But die with all their music in them" (Oliver Wendell Holmes) [This message has been edited by strbbux (03-10-2002 08:37 AM).] |
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