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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-03-08 08:45 PM


A spray of salt wash covers me
from crashing waves of souls
A veil of moisture from the sea
as bell of life now tolls.

A life in touch with destiny
of man and sea and sail
Crying of voice to once set fee
in times of watery flail.

A wave will wash from land to land
this bott’ of glass and note
as fish of prey do take a hand
from life’s rubbery boat

In sight of land the eye is not
in heat of hottest day
the swell of tongue from briny salt
takes not the thirst away

Blue sea has now the best of me
to feed the fish of late
For days of hope were dashed, you see
once I became the bait.

As stars do guide the way of men
in search of distant shore
The briny deep will take them in
for want of nevermore

[This message has been edited by Magnus (03-09-2002 07:08 AM).]

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jwesley
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1 posted 2002-03-08 08:48 PM


Could see it, feel it, smell it Mangus...don't know about you but Nevermore has always been just out of reach for me...

the journey, goes on...

jwesley

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2 posted 2002-03-08 08:56 PM


Jimmy,  such is the life of a sailor, for
this was the destiny of so many brave souls.

Thank You!

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3 posted 2002-03-08 09:05 PM




(sigh) Wow, this is a wonderful poem about a sailor's life, sweet friend, may every one learn to follow the stars and seek their dreams upon the oceans of life with a smile! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



may love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-03-08 09:08 PM


Yes this is a wonderful poem of sailors, and I love the water, great write again Magnus. love this.floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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5 posted 2002-03-08 09:28 PM


This reminded me off all those who have ever been lost at sea, and the agonies they endure, nicely done!
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6 posted 2002-03-08 09:37 PM


Magnus hi there, I could hear the crash of the ocean and smell the ozone in the air, this is very picturesque write. You certainly have a great deal of ability to paint word pictures and you do it as mum would say utterly brilliantly. This is a very good poem

And don’t listen to my mum she loves having me share her computer, it gives her such a heaven sent opportunity to see me, *big smile*



Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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7 posted 2002-03-08 10:08 PM



This is perhaps one of your finest poems to date...the flow, rhyme and message is excellent!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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8 posted 2002-03-08 10:26 PM


As stars do guide the way of men
in search of distant shore
The briny deep will take them in
in search of nevermore
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Wonderful write Barry....thoroughly enjoyed this one tonight.
~Hugs, Nancy~

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     is someone to wish for you.~

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9 posted 2002-03-08 10:55 PM



So many thoughts come crashing in, so for now, I will say thank you, and come back again tomorrow, to see if the sun shines over this as well as the night winds set the seas to shimmering...

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10 posted 2002-03-08 11:06 PM


I agree with all, Barry. You wrote this in such a way that the sounds, smells an sensations became real....excellent work, sir
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11 posted 2002-03-09 07:22 AM


Noah, my young friend,  such is the life of
sailing ships and men who tend the sails...

Magnus
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12 posted 2002-03-09 07:23 AM


Floria,  thank you,  I could feel the salt
spray..and all of this...

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13 posted 2002-03-09 07:26 AM


Dulcinea,  Thank You!  YES!  You read this
perfectly...

Magnus
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14 posted 2002-03-09 07:28 AM


Krissy,  yes,  utterly so.....to coin a
word from your Mum....thank you...

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15 posted 2002-03-09 09:11 AM


Magnus, this created images in my head. The effect I love with poetry.

Dee

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16 posted 2002-03-09 01:45 PM


Magnus - I read this two ways.  One of a sailor whose life became lost to the perils of the sea.  The other was as a metaphor for a man who has given up hope of finding what he is looking for and wants nothing more but to be put out of his misery, so he can end his hopeless search.  Well, something like that.  Either way, you have crafted a fine poem here.

Dave

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17 posted 2002-03-09 02:04 PM


Dave....you were right on your first assumption.

It is of a person/persons in a raft afloat on the ocean....knowing that life is lost..
eventually sinking into the deep to be
consumed by the food chain so to speak...

Reminds me of the USS Annapolis sinking and
the story that goes with it...

Also of the countless sailors who have
died in search of other lands, treasures,
etc....  Let the imagination roll on this
one...

Thanx for your review and thoughts...

Barry

Magnus
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18 posted 2002-03-09 02:47 PM


Melissa,  thank you....I am truly pleased
that you have enjoyed it and feel as you do.

Nancy,  happy that I gave you something for
the evening...enjoy your thoughts..

KJ..  It brought out lots of thought within
myself as well....Yes,  shimmering seas that
carry life along...

Michael,  I always enjoy your words... You
are a perceptive reader/superb writer..and
I value your words..  Thank You!

Dee,  good to see you here,  very much
enjoy your thoughts...Thank You..

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