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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2002-03-08 02:42 PM



Come Into My Room


We first moved into that room,  
as the other would shake and sound
like the tractor trailers
were going to crash into it,
even though we were on the second floor.

Wallpapered in delicate burgundy roses
on cream background.
My homemade curtains and
quilted coverlet to match.
Even a canopy at one time,
always creatively challenging me...
just like the love we shared.

It's been so long since I slept
in my own room,
that room I use to share for twenty-two
of the last twenty-three years.
I remember the first waterbed and how
it moved each night during our
passionate loving.

How we progressed from double to queen
and just as we changed to a king,
you changed your feelings towards me...
the size now allowing each
to sleep entirely without touching.
We exchanged that last waterbed
for a firm mattress,
as firm as your resistance
had become towards me.

So I abandoned that room,
the night you abandoned me,
and until now, have only entered
when searching for something needed.

Today I straightened out the furniture,
touching where your prints still showed
through the dust that has gathered over time.
I find inside the tall chest, reminders of you,
cologne in an Avon antique car, and with it
the small dollhouse bottle that had been
a housewarming gift to me, you know,
the little white house and picket fence cliche.

There was also a small pistol
from when you served in VietNam,
your dog tags and military ID.
Ties were in the next drawer,
many I had chosen
as gifts over the years
to go with your clear blue eyes.
I always loved you in a suit.

In the bottom drawer,
you left behind a sweater,
a favorite of mine
from when we first met, a V-neck wool.
So long ago, when you were gone,
a friend of yours wore it
when taking me out.
Said he was protecting me,
while you were away, overseas.
Wore it so I could feel close to you.
Today, I stroked it gently with my hand,
lifted it to my cheek, bringing back
the soft memories of you.

I shall sleep once again,
in that king sized bed,
stretched out, bordered by memories,
as you come into my room tonight.


M




"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)


[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (03-08-2002 02:45 PM).]

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Victoria
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1 posted 2002-03-08 03:01 PM


this was sad..but very touching..something about those king size beds..just not as cozy as a double..hugss

          ~Vic

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2 posted 2002-03-08 03:23 PM


A very lovely write, Maureen.

((Maureen))
-newell

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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

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3 posted 2002-03-08 03:31 PM


Using the beds to show the stages of feelings was an excellent way of conveying the loss, and I enjoyed this very much.

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4 posted 2002-03-08 04:20 PM


Maureen,  this is sad,  but such beautiful
words...and so many feelings tied into this
poem,  the room,  the bed,  all of his
things...so many memories to lie beside you.

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5 posted 2002-03-08 04:22 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Awwwwwww, this is so sad but beautiful, sweet friend, I hope now love has filled the rooms of your heart once more and now you forever rest and share the heavens with the one you love! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sahring!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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6 posted 2002-03-08 05:54 PM


Victoria, well it's always sad to see a relationship end. I loved the king because I could position myself in any direction on the bed. *s
hugssss
M

Newell, Thank you for reading me today
hugsssss back

M


Mysteria, thank you ..I hadn't really thought of it that way and yet that was actually how it worked out in my  life..there must be a  message here somewhere *s



Barry, sad and truthful, was going to add some more..like  the one mismatched sock I found left under the vanity desk.. oh I have 32 years of memories so far..including the last few bad years..but they aren't so bad anymore..they have become routine, allowing the good memories to resurface finally as they did in a way today.
Thank You,
M

Noah, well thanks,  but there will be no loves  for me for a while anyway..need to remove one from my life first *s
hugssss
M




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7 posted 2002-03-08 06:14 PM


Maureen,

This one is a real tear jerker...goodness, should've give a hankie warning. LOL!  Very nice writing!

Michael

Stars will shine when I am gone
Earth will spin on as before
Gulls still race along the shore
Morning star, still kiss the dawn

~ M. Auguste

nakdthoughts
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8 posted 2002-03-08 06:21 PM


was meant to be a sigher maybe..not a tear jerker..darnnnnnnn I could really jerk the tears if I gave my life story from the beginning..it was  a fairytale love...just somehow  didn't end happily ever after..although 30 some years is a long time...

thanks Michael,
M


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9 posted 2002-03-10 03:15 AM


M,
So glad I didn't miss this poem. For all its sadness I like best that you are, in fact, moving on. I am so very impressed by that. Let the healing begin. I look forward to the day when love once again captures your sensitive heart! Just an awesome job on this poem.

Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy

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10 posted 2002-03-10 09:21 AM


Larry, sadness, truth...I have given alot of thought to my "predicament" and  realize there are many mistakes I have made in dealing with this situation. One is I must relieve myself of all that impedes my progress...so I am cleaning house, so to speak. And as for loving again..it's time I just love myself for who and what I am and not look for its chancing upon me again.

You may see a few more poems that will seem sad as I come across the memories while cleaning up my life...But be assured..they are just memories leaving me with a slightly crooked smile, an upraised eyebrow and a renewed energy.
hugsssss and thanks *s

M

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (03-10-2002 09:23 AM).]

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11 posted 2002-03-10 11:10 AM


enjoyed
nakdthoughts
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12 posted 2002-03-10 02:39 PM


thank you Vandana *s

M

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