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Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

0 posted 2002-03-06 05:01 PM

I was not just a springtime butterfly
upon wings of maybes or maybe not
I was but a butterfly dancing
to a breeze of a tenor solo
jack rabbits and roadrunners
sitting upon my welcome mat

The deer peeked in my window
with large gentle eyes
than you came along
with a butterfly net
and painted my wings
wishful shades of love

I hoped to lift your spirits
and carry them afar
upon brilliant wings
above mountainous waves
of reality
above the pain of despair
I hoped we could share
a slice of life together
thawing frozen pastries
into sweet graham cracker crumbs

Sometimes I wish
I could go back to that house
in the seclusion of the country
upon wings of a dream
touched by only a critter or two

[This message has been edited by Victoria (03-06-2002 05:01 PM).]

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2002-03-06 05:04 PM

I was not just a springtime butterfly
upon wings of maybes or maybe not
I was but a butterfly dancing
to a breeze of a tenor solo
jack rabbits and roadrunners
sitting upon my welcome mat

Wonderful opening lines.... and your images strong throughout. I wanted to take it someplace else in my mind when I read it..and you turned it a different direction and left me with a sigh...

hmm.... I thnk there is an Iambe tale in this....if you don't mind..

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-03-06 05:08 PM

Victoria this is truly lovely and if you have inspired Ron to do another lambe story...well, that is some kind of wonderful!
Love this one!
~hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-03-06 05:08 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, you are always a gorgeous butterfly of friendship who shares the light of flove with us all and you always create such beautiful imagery and dream-like places with your words! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, may you find a pastoral and beautiful place in the eyes of love always! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Victoria, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

4 posted 2002-03-06 05:12 PM

Ron...thank you..i just read your other tale..i read one today ha..of course why not?

nancy..thank you glad i can inspire someone haa...glad you enjoyed..hugs

noah..

but who couldnt love you..they would have to be nuts not to..hugs

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2002-03-06 05:13 PM

To go back sounds lovely. Nice write, Vic.
Sandra

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

6 posted 2002-03-06 06:13 PM

thanks sandra hon..hugss

GenXer
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since 2001-12-15

Posts 583
USA

7 posted 2002-03-06 07:02 PM

Victoria - You have made me hungry for graham crackers. Why do you have to mix food in with your writes?lol Seriously, this was great. I really enjoyed the analogies you incorporated with the butterfly. Nicely done.

Dave

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

8 posted 2002-03-06 08:31 PM

Hello Victoria

Yet another well written piece from you that was so much enjoyed.

Take care.....Sue

Suetang

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

9 posted 2002-03-06 09:38 PM

Such a peaceful poem painted ever so perfectly Vic....enjoyed the vision.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2002-03-06 10:02 PM

"I hoped we could share a slice of life together." I have thought these thoughts so many times...James

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

11 posted 2002-03-06 11:18 PM

Dave..thank you..ill try not to write about food anymore..at least nothing fattening..

Sue..thank you dear friend hugss

Barry..thank you so much..always nice hearing from you

thank you james..im sure you will one of these day...

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

12 posted 2002-03-07 12:39 PM

*sigh* you took me there with your words and I wanted to just lose myself in the simple beauty of it...I love this poem and the vision of it was incredibly desireable...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

13 posted 2002-03-07 12:56 PM

Thank you karen..i am glad you enjoyed my words...i use to live in the country so it was a true to life write. hugss

Dulcinea
Senior Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 774
IN

14 posted 2002-03-07 02:44 PM

This was so hauntingly beautiful Victoria, I enjoyed the imagery and felt the disenchantment...well done!

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

15 posted 2002-03-07 04:08 PM

thank you Dulcie..glad you enjoyed the walk in the country

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

16 posted 2002-03-07 06:08 PM

Victoria you paint with your words. Love this piece so very much. graham cracker crumbs and all. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

17 posted 2002-03-07 07:54 PM

This poem flaps it's wings and dances, Victoria...

gorgeous! ((hugs))

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Victoria

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since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

18 posted 2002-03-07 10:19 PM

thank you for peeking in floria..

hugss

thank you so much lyra...

hugss

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