Open Poetry #19 |
Two Hearts In Swoon |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Two hearts and souls upon the night In love of eyes in starlit sight from light of moon till dawn of day joined hearts in swoon and love and sway A step in time and tune and rhyme as two become one love in time and joy is then the way of choice as one becomes another’s voice. At break of day and dawn of sun when one as two become as one a kiss is shared as moist lips touch in view of all, in love of much Mirrored reflect caught in one dream of flowing love down a clear stream A swirl of leaves enter soft flight as lovers passion fills the night A gasp and sigh do touch the ear as drops of love from eyes flow clear two hands entwined tell of delight as love once made becomes so right |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
A step in time and tune and rhyme as two become one love in time and joy is then the way of choice as one becomes another’s voice. What a truly romantic write!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Magnus this is simply beautiful. Love these lines"two hands entwined tell of delight as love once made becomes so right" and all the rest. Very romantic loving poem. floria Floria |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Mirrored reflect caught in one dream of flowing love down a clear stream A swirl of leaves enter soft flight as lovers passion fills the night A gasp and sigh do touch the ear as drops of love from eyes flow clear two hands entwined tell of delight as love once made becomes so right ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Barry, oh Barry! Now I am sure you must have heard one big giant old sigh coming from up north tonight right? Certainly...I know the neighbours heard it. And they know Nancy is in the Passions site again reading Magnus. Well done! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Sometimes all you really wish for... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
A love lived... I like ThisDiamond |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Chris, thank you very much...very pleased that you enjoyed... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Floria...thank you...I wanted the cadence to be a little better, but overall I was pleased...and I am more so with your gracious reply... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Mirrored reflect caught in one dream of flowing love down a clear stream A swirl of leaves enter soft flight as lovers passion fills the night A gasp and sigh do touch the ear as drops of love from eyes flow clear two hands entwined tell of delight as love once made becomes so right" (big hugggsssssss) Oh Barry, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words never cease to capture the beauty of romance at its finest, this is soooooooo beautifully romantic! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, may your love forever swoon over these words! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Gosh Nancy, I thought it was an earthquake coming through the area....Whewww!! Had me worried...Happy you liked...THANX much.. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This Diamond....thank you...enjoy your words. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Noah, friend of mine...you are that...and I do always appreciate your words...thanx |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy this is simply outstanding writing, you have done so well here I don’t know how you do it. Again flawless and perfectly presented. What can I say but this is exceptional. YOU always write brilliantly and today is no exception. YOU have such a fabulous talent and in this your portray it to pure perfection Wonderful flow and rhythm the rhyme is fabulous too You can tell I love it can’t you? MMmmm I thought it would show Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mushy dearest, how could I ever not like your warm and wonderful words....they are an inspiration as much as all of the others that are so kind ... you are this my poetic friend... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Two hearts and souls upon the night A step in time and tune and rhyme At break of day and dawn of sun Mirrored reflect caught in one A gasp and sigh do touch the ear as love once made comes right, here Took a little of yours, tweaked, voila... see what you did? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ Southerly *sighing* is also in vogue~ 'joy is then the way of choice as one becomes another’s voice.' Very, very nicely penned~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Magnus...This is very beautiful and very touching. I think one of your very best. MAGNIFICENT PIECE!!!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* oh yes...a masterpiece of romance and love.......oh my gosh, Barry...you just keep getting better and making me sigh even before I start to read...This poem is ABSOLUTELY STUNNING....the romance in it made me all dreamy eyed...I love it...I love it...**big hugs** to be one of two hearts in swoon would be the most amazing thing to happen to any lady.... Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Magnus - Great romantic write. The rhythm and imagery of this poem was right on cue. Well done. Dave |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Another romantic one from you! Very nice! Cor |
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