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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2002-03-05 12:52 PM

the highway today
old dog stomach growling
as he stretches his legs
black asphalt fur
toward morning

he yawns purple gum mountains
with snowcap teeth
not as many
as last winter
but still a cold bite

to the early rise lady
that walks to sidewalk liars
for her news print
in underwearless robe
wishing for a new neighbor

that would be a willing wind
with wanting eyes
and hands
to carry the trash
of  her empty sighs

to a rented bedroom
with shout hard walls
and no name promises
then send her home again
a few hours later

with messed up hair
and rearranged makeup
and all of her empty places
overfilled with attention
she misses the swollen sore

of a dream dance stranger

©Dark

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

1 posted 2002-03-05 01:05 PM

you provide very interesting and very real images, Sir. I've always enjoyed your work.

*Jenn*

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2002-03-05 01:08 PM

pleased to please the eyes tempting1 thank you much

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2002-03-05 01:44 PM

Strong imagery through out... with the story told in few words. Nicely done...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-03-05 01:50 PM

Fantastic imagery Dark. Have I mentioned I love the way you write? It pleases me for sure!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2002-03-05 01:54 PM

Cpat, thank you so much...glad to have you visit

Nancy, so pleased to please you...and your eyes..thanks

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2002-03-05 07:31 PM

DarkStranger~

'he yawns purple gum mountains
with snowcap teeth
not as many
as last winter
but still a cold bite

to the early rise lady
that walks to sidewalk liars
for her news print
in underwearless robe
wishing for a new neighbor'

Your imagery draws the reader to your side~
This is a poignant read~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-03-05 07:34 PM

YAY!!! Ooohhhhhhh...your imagery is always so awesome, sweet friend, I can never pick a favorite stanza for the whole piece flows with such surreal wonder! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

8 posted 2002-03-05 08:06 PM

whew....the imagery your words give leave me breathless.....

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

9 posted 2002-03-05 10:09 PM

I can only echo the others. Wonderful imagery here. I read it a couple of times and it got more interesting each time.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

woodtic
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 87

10 posted 2002-03-05 10:35 PM

Trailer park dreamen in the walk-up way two bit Hotel with the ashtray sway. Smoke cold in winter in the dim lamp light glow. And go home to splinters on tin pan row.

Makes you feel like home. Or at least some I've known. good go there D.S.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

11 posted 2002-03-05 10:40 PM

You are so incredibly descriptive with your words that your poems always attract me...Magnificent...**big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

12 posted 2002-03-06 05:57 AM

Marge, bless you for your sweet eye touches
thanks so much

Naoh, what can I say, you are such a valued reader and friend

SEA, would take your breath for moments, and give it back as smiles

woodtic, can see the wind pushing flutter on tin skin mobiles lines in the park by the river with freedom voice thank you

startime, thank you for your lovely eyes and words

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

13 posted 2002-03-06 08:51 AM

tracey, thank you so much for the visit

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