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desperado
Member

since 1999-05-24

Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx

0 posted 2002-03-03 12:36 PM

it begins with a simple dream
where a story comes alive it would seem
from one tiny little line
a vision grows from story to vine
traveling across the ground
with little shoots in places to be found
green with flowers here and there
in various stages like people with hair
some with more some with less
things that never change when you confess
color and touch so many ways
different to all from what the sign says
meaning and depth changing with time
some just words and others that rhyme
but as for me I know today
that after I post I'll fall away
from the top of the world or just this page
of course who's to know at this day in age
but for now I'm falling
and I know that my pillow is calling
but people think that time deals with fashions
as for me it's eternal at passions
(or at least until ron runs out of money to keep it running)

(just realized I missed this part.)

People demand freedom of speech to make up for the freedom of thought which they avoid. --Soren Kierkegaard

[This message has been edited by desperado (03-03-2002 03:07 AM).]

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2002-03-03 02:51 AM

desperado,
no matter how much I tried I couldn't make the title fit the poem...unless you are talking about absence making the heart grow fonder over distance and time.
I liked it though. I liked its flow.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2002-03-03 03:01 AM

I liked the way you began with a simple dream and where you ended up with this.

Nice~

desperado
Member

since 1999-05-24

Posts 312
FT Hood,Tx

3 posted 2002-03-03 03:09 AM

sorry about this. I forgot to finish my point and just posted anyways. but here it is. it's about how poems slowly fall away from the top of the page. funny how I don't know how to describe them comming back up (ok I could but I'm just too tired and want to drink another beer)

People demand freedom of speech to make up for the freedom of thought which they avoid. --Soren Kierkegaard

Masked Intruder

Moderator

Senior Member

since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

4 posted 2002-03-03 03:27 AM

Tired? You're slacking off big time, bro. lol

Wake me up tomorrow night so I can do my homework wouldya?

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

5 posted 2002-03-03 12:34 PM

Hi hi...you're right..some fall..all I can say is that the ones who don't get to come here often..when they finally get to post and there isn't much response, its the readers that are missing out.

and this does seem unfinished. I've been lucky to be on here lately at the rate I'm going.

anyways..I like this but get yer rear on the move and finish it already.

Funny and wonderful that I've gotten to watch your writing grow over the past few years. I'm loosing count of how long I've known you, but it seems like forever. Okay..I suppose I should move this to e-mail status now?

its good to see you writing.

For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-03-03 08:48 PM

(sigh) Oh James, I know just how you feel, sweet friend, I have been fortunate enough to post a lot here lately but I believe we all have these feelings and my heart goes out to you! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such abeautifu heart, sweet James, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

7 posted 2002-03-03 08:55 PM

Falling?? Shoot...sometimes it is like an
avalanche coming down the mountain...I can
relate to the feeling of falling down the
page...

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

8 posted 2002-03-09 01:17 AM

hehe...

quote:
or at least until ron runs out of money to keep it running

i love you, sweet nephew of mine.... LOL!!!!!

you make me fall further away from the absurdity of it all with your beautiful passionate words

hey listen.... psssssssttttt ...... you still coming to virginia? just wondering....

email me

your rhyme's got a timing so sublime it makes me feel the rhythm of your heart!

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