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You Must and I Do
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You Must and I Do |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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If I do and you don’t will it matter any more If I won’t and you will must I walk out the door. If two hearts become one and two lives then do part will you let me become a lost part of your heart. If my words cannot say what you do want to hear Must it be another day less a heart that is near. When I look in your eyes and see the darkness there Can I then realize that we’ll no longer share. If you can and I can’t If you are and I’m not I will say this to you that you must and I do. For I will and I won't and we must and I don't |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This may falter for loss of words but what you spoke is what I heard |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Barry, all I can say in answer to this one is...GREAT WRITE AND T.G.I.F.!  ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Karilea....guess that means that I got into your gut....deep within...good....must have written it properly...Thank You.... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nancy...YEP...TGIF...double that...TGIF... Have a wonderful weekend in Canada...Hope your weather is OK.. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Wow. I think my head is going to hurt now. It's too close to closing time to think this through. I was following it till the last bit. I'll reread it tomorrow when my brain starts working again. Anyway, I enjoyed it. Nan |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nan....I left the last as a little twister to allow the reader to figure out their own words that fit....HMMMMMMM????? What could it be...Even I have several variations.. Thank you for your response... |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Magnus hi there this is a very good piece of writing, I followed it until the end and then got lost, but as I read your reply I know I was supposed to. So I’ll give it a happy ending I think   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers at every pore with instant fires Andrew Marvell 1621-1678 [This message has been edited by Krissy (03-01-2002 06:33 PM).] |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Wow all these questions got my head a spinning magnus, But I LOVE it. so original, so creative. Did you? Did she? LOL oh never mind. LOL...gave me a good chuckle. floria Floria |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Krissy...yes...the ending could definitely ... turn your mind around and around....I did it so that everyone could draw their own ending from it...good or bad....glad or sad... You must go....I do understand... You must know....I do love you... Can go many different ways... Glad you enjoyed... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Ooohhhhhh...I love your wonderful play of words, sweet friend, I am not sure if I understood this or not but your words always touch our hearts in such a wonderful way that has us wondering and smiling! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is terrific! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Magnus - I must and I will, go back and read this again! Enjoyed! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Exactly! Well said, and well done.  ThisDiamond |
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Lia Fail Member
since 2002-02-26
Posts 80 |
wow!! this is good! Lia |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Very interesting poem!!! Full of twists and turns...like the natural ebbing and flowing of love. And, I think when love enters, it takes up a space, a piece of the heart. But when love exits, we lose that part; but gain a memory stored. ***Ivy Rose |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
well you spoke and I heard but my head turned it round like a hovering bird have I lost or gained ground? What you said I agree though I'm sure you will know is it all history should I stay or just go? Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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emily Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 142USA |
This gave me comfort today, I just came from a cemetery, and I found these words fit what I'm feeling right now...which is utter hopelessness....but somehow I knew that if I just read something from your pen, it would give me some breath of compassion....in my grief... thank you for this poem. Emily |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh gosh Emily....you have just touched me very deeply....Warm HUGS....I am sorry for your grief....Warm HUGS... Thank YOU..... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I reread it again today. It's even better the third time around. Thanks for the explanation of the last bit. I'll go with the upbeat ending then, I like them best. Nan |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Good write, Barry. A little different, and an interesting style. Sandra |
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