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Upon Ending |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Stone smooth and exiting, though ragged scraps of longing slide, across the floor in fits and lines. Seems only the walls and doorway smooth out in strength and knowing. This time. A corner of silence attempting, so, skipping through the liquid of inside delights, Somehow, despite the fear tainting. I'll continue to dance, wasted on a mean tug of seeing. And although I remember yesterday like the crust of a severed vein, weeks old - dry - suffocating almost, but healing, Saturday will still have enough heat to surround a wonder, and a heart half flickered and light. And so there is patience in waiting, for answers to stain, I know, seal strength in satin and dry,... top coat and gleaming, yes. [This message has been edited by SpitFire (03-02-2002 08:17 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Wow, I can feel a strong yearning in these words but also much hope, sweet friend, there is indeed patience in waiting and I am delighted you feel rest and comfort now, and I know in the end you will be as happy as you can ever dream of! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
like the choice of words and the images from them, keep up the writing  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Seems only the walls and doorway smooth out in strength and knowing. This time. A corner of silence attempting, ========================== Somehow. Despite the fear tainting, ============================== wasted on a mean tug of seeing. And although I remember yesterday like the crust of a severed vein, weeks old - dry - suffocating almost, but healing, Saturday will still have enough heat to surround a wonder, and a heart half flickered and light. And so there is patience in waiting, for answers to stain, =================================== Such a deeply personal write...so layered and complex...or more so intricate. The imagery alone has more depth than one or two reads could ever reveal. You have this amazing gift for writing the emotions dressed up in abstract confessions ...that draws the reader in and holds them to your every word in fascination. Good to see your name here A-girlie. heart-hugs mothy me Dont walk before me, lord knows I cant follow |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
What a way to end my day...reading words of yours...and though someone put grafittie (or what ever!) on your picture, I still see you standing there. Now I go to ponder what you've said... jwesley |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Yeah, what happened to your picture?? This is one strong poem, Alicia. Complex, a lttle out of my understanding at the moment,maybe you can explain it to me sometime. Sandra |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
SpitFire Such a search the heart makes, then ends with the turning upward into peace, or at least hope. I love the way you write! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
And although I remember yesterday like the crust of a severed vein, weeks old - dry - suffocating almost, but healing,,, Oh Dear Alicia, how I can relate to these lines you've so perfectly penned. "Almost suffocating" yes! "but healing" indeed, Indeed! God, you take my breath away! This is going into my library. Maree |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
ooops, doing the library thing this time definitely.  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Spitfire, amazing images the one that got me besides the vein thingy was the coat of paint which seals and makes everything shiny. Fantabulous. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You've got such depth and talent. It's quite the combination! And I always enjoy reading you~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~  ,...Thank you more than words can relay, for reading, time, and thought. *Peace sweet poets. (the photo's just gone, for now, perhaps I'll find a new one soon, and I agree though, that what's there now does look like some kind of graffiti, ugh). |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Its always a treat for my mind to read a poem from you. I enjoyed this. So many good lines that I'd have to copy/paste almost the entire poem to detail them all. Powerful as usual. For all who watch.Dare you say hello? Come in and ask the questions that are on your mind, but spare me your judgement until you truly sipped of me. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Deep and powerful as always, my friend. Nice to see you here. Take care. All writing comes |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow, certainly worth another read! We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And although I remember yesterday like the crust of a severed vein, weeks old - dry - suffocating almost, but healing, Saturday will still have enough heat to surround a wonder, and a heart half flickered and light. And so there is patience in waiting, for answers to stain, =================================== imagery, metaphor, symbolism... brilliance... your writing. |
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