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The Violin is Crying
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The Violin is Crying |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Violin is Crying The violin is crying its grace caught within the curve taut to almost fragile it takes me to the ground wrapped with icy winds then to drown It hurts it hurts to sing this way the sound so sharp it points a trill into the rhythm of today with purpose movement away Stay this thrill that takes me skyward for too soon gone is time and touch can only happen if you let it play the satin let it rip your hair around until you face the grace Listen the violin is crying not me |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
With poetry like this...it certainly is not crying for you Martie....Nice. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It hurts it hurts to sing this way the sound so sharp it points a trill into the rhythm of today with purpose movement away Stay this thrill that takes me skyward for too soon gone is time and touch can only happen if you let it play the satin let it rip your hair around until you face the grace =========================================== I have always thought the violin sounded like it was crying...but I could have never put it into words like this. I hear it playing in my head.  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Wow, I love the wonderful imagery and emotion in this one, sweet friend, your words and language always speak with music and melody! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Stay this thrill that takes me skyward for too soon gone is time and touch can only happen if you let it play the satin let it rip your hair around until you face the grace Listen the violin is crying not me ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Beautiful Martie! Enjoyed this one so very much this afternoon. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
IWIHWT...you did it Martie! You wrote the violin so very well... Ok, so here I sit, literally blown away...you've taken ALL my words, Martie... Oh..yes...keeper...a definite, definitive keeper... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The violin is crying its grace caught within the curve taut to almost fragile it takes me to the ground wrapped with icy winds then to drown It hurts it hurts to sing this way the sound so sharp it points a trill into the rhythm of today with purpose movement away Lord!.... If I could write as you do, I might give up my day job... excellent!!!! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Martie...only one thing to say...I just loved this!! jwesley |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, when you write, you don't fiddle around! This is awesome, m'lady  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wonderful write once again Martie. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhMartie~ I've already sent this one to my son ... he will understand this so well~ You made this mother's nostalgia come bouncing through the screen~ I could have sworn I 'heard' it crying ... I reached to turn up the speakers ... and realized quickly what I'd done~ Now if THAT isn't effective writing .. I don't know what is~  Beautiful lady~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie I adore violin music, and you have done the violin such justice in this write. How on earth do you take the same words I know, twist them to shreds, and come up with the most beautiful poetry ever to grace my mind and eyes? This I have yet to figure out. I agree with the Captain, if I could write like this I would be in bookstores, and this would be my passion. Can you tell I loved this one, and it is the keeper of the year for me so far! ~* Imagination is more important than knowledge *~ |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Martie, I enjoyed the poem, to me it cries in the voice of beauty, brought out a little of something in me. Sincerely Rick The violin lay within its place till beaconed by the child But with each stroke the bow did make, the violin only cried For there was not the pleasured sound that it was taught to know The melody was missing and the tempo had no flow The child had heard the violin sing when mother came to play But somehow all its happiness, had left and gone away So there she cried, untaught and sad, but needing friend to sing To learn the art of music, now just meant everything Mother can you play it ? For me it only cries So mother took her friend of years and wiped her daughters eyes She played a tune so lovely, that a joy came to her heart The married tunes of loveliness from violin came to part The cries had turned to music, to the harmony of strings The hand of taught through gift had shown the music that it brings And all around could hear the sound, and knew, A Violin Sirens cry from on their rocks, but violins seem to sing |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is magic Martie. floria Floria |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
The good news is, the violin (my favorite) is capable of all ranges of emotions, so here's to the changing tune. Enjoyed |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
violin crying guitar softly weeps bagpipes moan the widow waiting song images come from your words and blend with outhers that are mostly forgotten sometimes well done ms martie |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- This is absolutely beautiful, and penned in the way that only YOU can. I love it, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Something....to remember! |
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