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Mystic Mystron
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since 2002-02-15

Posts 69
North York .Ontario

0 posted 2002-02-27 11:29 PM

In the moonlight, on a cool starry summers night
A young couple sits on the front porch on an old wooden swing
Hands held fast and close to their heavy beating hearts
They look up together to see the stars as they twinkle on and off
He turns and looks at her and sees the beauty within her
A beauty seen only in the stars, a beauty so deep and pure
He smiles at her as she turns to sees him looking and he steals a kiss
A kiss that was so simple and yet so meaningful
For his love for her was so strong and full
And on this porch this cool summers night his hand is shaking
He reaches in a pocket that hide something special
He turns and knees and takes her hand and asks her to marry him
She looks him in the eye as a tear falls from her face
For her love for him is just the same, her lips tremble as she says

okthis is a very rough poem i need help fixig it up. please help..

May the mystic waters flow to inspire you to write a poem

Mystic Mystron
Member

since 2002-02-15

Posts 69
North York .Ontario

1 posted 2002-02-28 12:01 PM

oops
May the mystic waters flow to inspire you to write a poem

[This message has been edited by Mystic Mystron (02-28-2002 12:01 AM).]

Magicmystery
Senior Member

since 2002-02-13

Posts 821
Windsor, Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2002-02-28 12:02 PM

oh common now honey.... I don't think that this poem is so rough.. and I do remember a few kisses like that.... but asking for her hand in marriage... I had to BUG you for that for a long time.... (this happenned 2 years ago today.)

and by the way, where was that swing again....

your loving wife, Sherry

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

[This message has been edited by Magicmystery (02-28-2002 12:03 AM).]

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

3 posted 2002-02-28 08:41 PM

This is sweet. I believe congrats are at hand! An offering of a precious memory and heart. I didn't find it rough at all...it is tender in fact. May you both continue the moment in time's loving hands. Thank you for sharing.

Sincerely,
Regina

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-02-28 08:50 PM

Honest?  I have to be honest Mystron??
You'll have to wait until I stop giggling.
No, it is good really, and I enjoy hearing about your romance with Sherry.
It did have a cute ending...
NO! not the romance, the poem!
Your romance goes something like...and they lived happily ever after.
Good stuff here!
~Magical smiles, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-02-28 10:33 PM

(sigh) Oh my gosh, this brought tears to my eyes, this is so so beautiful! (big hugggssssss) Oh my gosh, I hope she said yes, this is sooooooo pretty, we're all so happy for you and Sherry and the joy of love you've found! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is absolutely beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Wilfred, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Mystic Mystron
Member

since 2002-02-15

Posts 69
North York .Ontario

6 posted 2002-03-01 07:45 PM

Thank you all for your words of insparation.
And even if it never happened that way it is what is in my heart and it is great that we as poets can express our feelings and dreams.

Thank you again all.

You are a good poet as soon as you try to reach others with your words.
You are a great poet when those same words touch your heart first.

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