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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I know of affirmations that I should recite, and even words I find absurd incite me in the night. My subconscious, reprimanding, living in the flesh, demanding, judge and jury notwithstanding... voices echo in my mind. Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept volcano grows beneath the rug where my memories were swept... voices mocking in my mind. Bridges leading anywhere Taxi cabs are at my door The roads curve long in sweet "come on" my soul in ache to taste of more... voices beckon in my mind. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept volcano grows beneath the rug where my memories were swept... A haunting verse, some wonderful images. repost or not, a great poem  "difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I loved the flow to this one. Well done on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
"My subconscious, reprimanding, living in the flesh, demanding, .... " Not bad! I like the feel of these lines, the rhythm you've established makes for good readingIt's nice to share - kiss someone when you have a cold. |
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