|Kellie in the Park
since 2001-11-05Posts 2527
She came to the Blithe garden in a happy state of mind
Exploring every little thing that she had come to find:
She came anticipating sun, but there was only rain:
She came to lean upon a tree, but it was split in twain.
She came to count the tulip's heads; there wasn't one to spy on,
She came to smell a rose, but there was just a dandelion.
She came to see the tire-swing, but it was lying dead:
So she sat in it anyways, and she reclined her head---
As if her dreams contained a garden boundless on all sides,
She ran her fingers through the grass, went up and down the slide,
She ran towards the limits of the field, but when I fenced it,
She felt it was enough to spread her arms and lay against it:
Such was the nature of her dream, and when I saw her start to wake
I bid her close her eyes again, for her imagination's sake.
[This message has been edited by Local Parasite (09-25-2004 07:46 PM).]
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since 1999-09-21Posts 28049
This is so charming, it captured my heart. Beauty is everywhere, for those like kellie (and you). Thank you for my enjoyment.
since 2000-02-02Posts 27738
for imagination's sake...
at first I thought this would be a better title, but then I thought how enticingly innocent YOUR choice was and damn if you don't win again.
yer lovely yanno
since 2000-02-02Posts 2797
Can I be honest? I didn't like it all that much. It was a nice topic but it didn't really speak to me like your others pieces tend to.
You still rock though.
I'm not being rude. You're just insignificant.
since 2002-05-22Posts 1667
and you can visit the website with the pictures to interpret your own meaning as well.
then click the link to pictures.
Brian- This poem was very touching.
since 2000-10-29Posts 19200
Between the Lines
I thought it a beautiful poem...and I enjoy meter and rhyme
since 2001-09-10Posts 10286
I'm sure it is true. Most of us write for ourselves and rather revel in the fact that others like it too. Well done. It forced me to ponder the good in circustances that I might not find so good. Thanks for that.
If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.
since 2001-02-15Posts 2681
I really liked this peice, I agree with AF that it really didnt speak to me as much as some of you other peices but it really is quite a charming little poem.
since 2000-06-01Posts 1958
Hey, Allan, I'm back. This was an interesting poem. A jab at urbanization, I gather? In any case, it was nice and it reminded me sorta of a poem by William Blake.
2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2
since 1999-06-22Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
this was really good. something like in a book even.
since 2003-01-23Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass
Heptameter....sheesh.....let me guess, you thought you were giving birth to a sonnet, but those fertility drugs they'd given you.......
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since 2000-02-02Posts 27738
I love the Rat's response too. Quite funny.
and this happens to be one of my favorite poems too.
So thanks, twice.
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