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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Breakfast Tentative steps of tiny feet pitter-patter of an early shower * Beads of cool clear rain glide gently down its face carried softly as it is like sweet ambrosia * Calmly she creeps through sharpened blades of green and rests upon the warming stone * The distant trickle of fallen water cuts through, the air refreshed * Black and white she sends her love days old it still smells fresh. Hmm... |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I enjoyed this one for its soft language and its pithy verse. Good job. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Some lovely imagery here. I can just feel the refeshing spring water and smell the flowers. Very nice work.. I won't try to decipher it atm, it's been awhile since I've read anything, so I'm rusty. I wanted to comment though, because I still enjoyed it very much! Oh, make me Thine forever |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Andrew, one of your best writes yet. Nature at its most beautiful. one for the library.  |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
It's always amazing when you can hear the voice inside your head saying all of the words of a poem. Congrats, Zu, very few have accomplished this voice, at least, with me. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for the replies. |
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