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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Intimidated emotions and you don't notice my imperfections, you don't see my bad side, you don't understand my incredible lack of courage, or why I wouldn't just stand up and scream, express myself. You are noticeable, I blend in. You see me, and you could never understand why anyone would think I was anything but beautiful, anything short of incredible, I'm "awesomer", you say and I blush. I want to ask you, which tastes better a raindrop, or a snowflake when you catch them on your tongue- are they better when I'm around? Obviously, I am stuck inside my skin. I'd invite you in, but there's barely any room to share mud puddles, and kickball games, your face wet with the rain, I'll take you home with me and make you hot chocolate, I'll keep all my promises, I swear. I want to kiss your face. Broken pieces shoved inside this almost realistic plastic looking glass and you are home to me, I just could never speak it, could never make it real, I want to keep you in the bathtub like I say I will. Let you live here forever with me. If you want to, you can stay and I will make myself home for you, I will tell you all the secrets, and you will smile at me, like you always do, and I will forever wonder why I always keep my mouth shut. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Maybe the cat's got your tongue  Ah but ain't love just grand? |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
This is beautiful.. So many little personal details that set it apart from 'just another love poem'.. "I want to keep you in the bathtub like I say I will" <-- That's such a cool line!!!! There is one piece I don't understand though - "Broken pieces shoved inside this almost / realistic plastic looking glass..." Almost realistic plastic looking glass.. What is it referring to? I love the images "and you are home to me" and "you can stay and I will make myself home to you.." That's a really special feling, and simply put like that is just.. Just right.  Bless your cotten sockies, you poetic maniacs. ^_^ |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thank you kindly for your reply, Yu Lan. I want to keep you in the bathtub like I say I will is actually a line inspired by one of my friends (who is a lesbian) who found it funny when i said that I wanted to keep him in the closet. She said I couldn't, so I said that bathtubs were more fun anyway..  Broken pieces shoved inside this almost/ realistic looking plastic glass is probably confusing because it is meant to represent me. Everything about me has been cracked and then shoved back inside an almost realistic covering that you can never really tell whether it is cloth or skin, plastic or glass. Hopefully that clears up some of the confusion. Oh to be young and kind of in love..  |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
"I want to ask you, which tastes better a raindrop, or a snowflake when you catch them on your tongue- are they better when I'm around?" *Smile* Lovely lines. Liz xx "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
sorry, forgot to check the library box. "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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