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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2001-05-08 12:00 PM

*A special thanks to acire for the phrase that became the title (and TWO lines) of this poem. This is another in the 'Immortal Clan' series. I've decided to write the story of these amazing women - from the time the curse was placed on them, through their trials to survive. I hope you watch for it.

She always seemed so different
Than all the other girls
Often she went hunting
While her sisters combed their curls

Her mother's look of disdain
Caused Lily's heart to cry
She tried hard to be good
But couldn't though she'd try

As she grew into womanhood
She heard whispers of her name
Changeling is the word they used
Fruit of her father's shame

Proudly she walked among
Those that caused her scorn
Little did she know that she
Was of the Immortals born

Stolen from her mother's breast
Taken from the Immortal Clan
Lily was to pay the price
For the shame of mortal man

Fiercely proud her blood ran hot
As she neared her mating age
Unable to understand her lust
Unable to contain her rage

The men could not resist her
Though she tried not to entice
Her sisters faded into the walls
For they were merely 'nice'

She awoke one starless night
To find her mother standing near
'you must go' she whispered
'tis for your life I fear'

'you are not one of us
you are Immortal born
no longer can I stand aside
and take your foolish scorn'

Lily rose and pleaded
To be told the story true
And when twas done she realized
What it was she must do

Lily left her father's house
Dressed as a mortal man
Hair shorn close to her head
She sought out the Immortal Clan

into the darkened road she walked
with the moon her only ally
driven by her need to find
the truth behind the lie

two years she traveled thus
as she grew to woman full
and still she felt the power
in the Immortal clan's pull

she had almost given up
grown weary from the search
when she found a secret valley
entrenched in a stand of birch

Boldly she walked into camp
And stood among Immortal Clan
'I've come home' she cried valiantly
'escaped from a mortal man'

Her mother quickly embraced her
To welcome her home at last
For many nights they sat and shared
The memories of their past.

Full-grown now she sought her mate
As the Immortal women must
into the darkened road she walked
compelled by Immortal lust.

Allan Riverwood

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1 posted 2001-05-08 12:58 PM

Oh, this was a delight. I really enjoy all installments into this crazy world you've created, it's so very involving and always has me gripping my seat.

I like this one a lot... just like the rest.  I have a few questions.
1.  If my memory serves me correctly, this one and the other two I've read were written in a similar format.  Is there any chance that you'll depart into something else for one of the installments?
2.  Could you give a bit of background info on this world of yours, so that we can more easily understand what you are talking about?
Of course I'll understand if you'd rather not tell us, let us figure these things out for ourselves... but personally I prefer to have a little bit of info, especially on stories like this that spark my interest.
I'm a real fan of the science fiction/fantasy genre of reading... so this all appeals to me a great deal.
I'm looking forward to the rest.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)

2 posted 2001-05-08 01:03 AM

i have had the pleasure to read others in the series and i love them all and this is no exception o yuh

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2001-05-08 09:51 AM

Thanks guys.

Allan, I'm going to write a story telling the tale from the beginning..it actually started with a challenge phrase from a friend - I wrote one poem and it evolved into a series. Each one is about a different member of the clan...so the story will be based on the first Immortal Woman.

Joyce Johnson

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4 posted 2001-05-09 08:33 PM

This is really fun. I hope to read the other chapters. Joyce

Elizabeth

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5 posted 2001-05-10 10:08 PM

This is turning out to be quite a series. I'm looking forward to the next ones.

Dopey Dope

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6 posted 2001-05-13 02:46 PM

Well done!!!!!!!

wow.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

7 posted 2001-05-17 09:58 AM

Thank you!!

The story is in prose by the way....

Irish Rose
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8 posted 2001-05-17 08:49 PM

This held my attention to the very last line, This is great, Sharon, I mean really good.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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9 posted 2001-05-21 08:02 PM

Oh Sharon, This is excellent. I enjoyed it very much, as I did your prose of the "Immortal Clan"

Applauding you my dear.

Maree

Acies

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Twilight Zone

10 posted 2001-06-14 07:30 PM

huh? The title came from me?
Oh, ok

marvelous read Sharon
wow!!! specially the last stanza
"immortal lust"

i loved the read

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic

bsquirrel

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11 posted 2002-05-23 01:50 PM

Yr Goddess at this stuff.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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