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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
*A special thanks to acire for the phrase that became the title (and TWO lines) of this poem. This is another in the 'Immortal Clan' series. I've decided to write the story of these amazing women - from the time the curse was placed on them, through their trials to survive. I hope you watch for it. She always seemed so different Than all the other girls Often she went hunting While her sisters combed their curls Her mother's look of disdain Caused Lily's heart to cry She tried hard to be good But couldn't though she'd try As she grew into womanhood She heard whispers of her name Changeling is the word they used Fruit of her father's shame Proudly she walked among Those that caused her scorn Little did she know that she Was of the Immortals born Stolen from her mother's breast Taken from the Immortal Clan Lily was to pay the price For the shame of mortal man Fiercely proud her blood ran hot As she neared her mating age Unable to understand her lust Unable to contain her rage The men could not resist her Though she tried not to entice Her sisters faded into the walls For they were merely 'nice' She awoke one starless night To find her mother standing near 'you must go' she whispered 'tis for your life I fear' 'you are not one of us you are Immortal born no longer can I stand aside and take your foolish scorn' Lily rose and pleaded To be told the story true And when twas done she realized What it was she must do Lily left her father's house Dressed as a mortal man Hair shorn close to her head She sought out the Immortal Clan into the darkened road she walked with the moon her only ally driven by her need to find the truth behind the lie two years she traveled thus as she grew to woman full and still she felt the power in the Immortal clan's pull she had almost given up grown weary from the search when she found a secret valley entrenched in a stand of birch Boldly she walked into camp And stood among Immortal Clan 'I've come home' she cried valiantly 'escaped from a mortal man' Her mother quickly embraced her To welcome her home at last For many nights they sat and shared The memories of their past. Full-grown now she sought her mate As the Immortal women must into the darkened road she walked compelled by Immortal lust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Oh, this was a delight. I really enjoy all installments into this crazy world you've created, it's so very involving and always has me gripping my seat.  I like this one a lot... just like the rest. I have a few questions. 1. If my memory serves me correctly, this one and the other two I've read were written in a similar format. Is there any chance that you'll depart into something else for one of the installments? 2. Could you give a bit of background info on this world of yours, so that we can more easily understand what you are talking about? Of course I'll understand if you'd rather not tell us, let us figure these things out for ourselves... but personally I prefer to have a little bit of info, especially on stories like this that spark my interest. I'm a real fan of the science fiction/fantasy genre of reading... so this all appeals to me a great deal. I'm looking forward to the rest.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i have had the pleasure to read others in the series and i love them all and this is no exception o yuh |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thanks guys. Allan, I'm going to write a story telling the tale from the beginning..it actually started with a challenge phrase from a friend - I wrote one poem and it evolved into a series. Each one is about a different member of the clan...so the story will be based on the first Immortal Woman. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This is really fun. I hope to read the other chapters. Joyce |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
This is turning out to be quite a series. I'm looking forward to the next ones.  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done!!!!!!!  wow. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you!! The story is in prose by the way.... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This held my attention to the very last line, This is great, Sharon, I mean really good. Kathleen Blake |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Sharon, This is excellent. I enjoyed it very much, as I did your prose of the "Immortal Clan" Applauding you my dear. Maree |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
huh? The title came from me? Oh, ok marvelous read Sharon wow!!! specially the last stanza "immortal lust" i loved the read hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Yr Goddess at this stuff. She said burn ... together. |
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