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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Today, I would like to steal your every word -- dissolve each syllable in my mouth, before one ever takes to breath. Shaped sounds contoured as a river: the Tigris burning through the sand, the solitude that greets the Thames. Churning strength of Amazon. In selfish satisfaction, I'll take your words beyond their meaning -- crack my way through context's ceiling. Little flecks of its glass scatter through the sky. (we call them stars) In obeisance, anticipated, I will wait for you ... Thieve my words, too -- snatch them away! They are yours alone. We'll rarely need an affirmation of presence, holding strong. Twin eyes, deepened, tangled tributaries -- gathered travel -- poetry. Unfathomable to all but us and time. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (10-20-2003 12:55 PM).] |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Wow Mikey, this's one of my faves from you... the title is absolutely perfect, and is a good example of how important a title is capable of being to a poem. It helped me interpret the structure and see what you meant by it. You told me earlier that interpetation is up to the reader, and that meaning is something that's dependent on whatever one takes away from it. You also said that you were really only interested in what the poem made your reader feel or think. It seems like this is a poem about that ideology of yours... that language is something used to communicate more than language, more than meaning, and that you want to take every word of a person (this poem seems to be specific as to who that person is), and read more than their meanings, and you want them to do the same thing to yours---take your words and taste them, feel them, gather the full spectrum of their effect, beyond just their meaning. I dunno, Mikey... you're way over my head most of the time, but I still love to read what you write. Thanks for the answer. Brian Faith is a fine invention |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
mr. squirrel, you are so cool. I have to say that I absolutely love the first stanza of this... it reaches me, grabs me and holds me through the rest of this poem. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I had this whole long critique thing but I was stupid and lost it so now I'll just have to say that I love it. you are amaizing squirrel...you really are. What about China? Have you seen the Great Wall? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You're all too sweet. Much thanks. |
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