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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia 
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Alone I cry and tears cover these blood-orange cheeks two single lines of pain showing of 'my life, my sorrow' I walk the hazel of this land stooped like death where grass and branches scratch at my skin they form tiny tracks of nothing not even my brows are amused they remain straight and thick over shattered sight my mind bruises against the uneven edges of 'this reality this silence' and what remains are only the memories I'm my own stranger complete with blurry reflections of a childhood I once knew In my darkness I fade away the sun rise is wasted and it's setting pale only the moon though dim tweaks a glow in the filmy night to comfort me |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh wow this one hit me hard. Well done the two of you!!!!!! That came out even better than I ever expected it to....you two worked quite well together. Once again....wow on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Did you two cheat?--- Spend like hours on the phone together??--- This is really really good,,  There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is very dramatic, lots of emotion in it... which is hard to do as a collaboration. Very well done, it's quite obvious that the two of you really connected when you wrote this.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow...this hit me hard also.. great job on thsi ...i'm looking so forward in doing this..great job you two..i loved this!..  ..?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow....this is great!!! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i debated because if I reply right now then it is a tie on replies between y'alls and ours. heheh awesome poem yuh guys. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Another fantastic duet! Great job! |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow... this one knocked me off of my feet. I can really feel the emotion in this one. Great work, you two. Thanks for sharing.  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
GAWD!!! This is amazing. You couldn't even tell the difference between each stanzas. I am assuming you 2 took your turn. ~*stands up and applauds*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Fantastic you two!! You two write great together! <*\\\>< |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi all THANKYOU you wonderful poets so very much for your kind and lovely replies and for taking the time to read And Marie, I want to tell you that it was a real pleasure writing with you and that you were/are a wonderful inspiration. I look forward to writing with you again I thank you Maree |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Great job, you guys! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Yes, thank you all for the awesome replies.. I don't tell you enough, but you guys rock!! Maree, it was awesome working with you too. You're a really talented poet, and it's a honor to say I wrote this with you Until the next collaboration..Thank again, everyone --Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
wow, yeah the styles are similar in each stanza, this is so well done! Emotional and.. WOW.. ^_^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the incredilbe talent of you both has blended to create a msterpiece. this is truly incredible writing. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, This...This...This is superb I mean 2 of my favorite poets and a third whom I have never had the honor to meet go and form a this! I loved it and its going into my library. Until your next poems -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Proof....the whole may indeed be greater than the sum of its parts. The very fact that two let their writing coalesce...that is magic. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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