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Wind
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0 posted 2003-09-11 10:09 PM



I follow two creatures in the night
wolf
wants
To
tear me to pieces

I’d rather
grow claws
and draw
jagged metal

These machines can’t crash if they never start.

I’ve stained everything around me
silver,
the blood of mercury
takes flight
and everything comes to life
at night

“doctor? I think this one’s stupid.”
I think I can walk through this window
and stay safe

I repeat-

none of us are…

Sorry-
I guess I can’t compute?
I wasn’t taught those words
or what to say
reponse-
someone tell me
how to speak.

I think I’m
going
to have
a
meltdown

And…well…
I’ve been known to talk to photographs
and the occasional raincloud
though lightning pulls right through me
sends a shock straight to my...

oh...I forgot

tinman,
I know how it feels
but none of us

are safe…

Symbiosis
tells me
to
wait it out.




And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool



[This message has been edited by Wind (09-11-2003 10:16 PM).]

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littlewing
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1 posted 2003-09-12 02:26 AM


Liz, amazing writing, as they all are
but this reminded me of societal breakdown, moreso of the human spirit . . .
you see quite well missy
xxoo

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
2 posted 2003-09-12 02:31 AM


Gah.. this is..
amazing..

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2003-09-12 09:02 AM


And…well…
I’ve been known to talk to photographs
and the occasional raincloud
though lightning pulls right through me
sends a shock straight to my...

oh...I forgot

tinman,
I know how it feels
but none of us

are safe…

Symbiosis
tells me
to
wait it out.
you know...

sure you know...

((hugs))


bsquirrel
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4 posted 2003-09-12 03:52 PM


Excellent! The LIV Bugs first single!
Wind
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5 posted 2003-09-12 04:16 PM


lol..thank you guys.

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

Ceinwyn
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6 posted 2003-09-12 07:59 PM


thats a good thing means I'm speechless...lol

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Riley
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in the pouring rain
7 posted 2003-09-14 09:55 PM


liz,
amazing poem here, just amazing...i love it!


rilllley

* the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes *

gemjop
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8 posted 2003-09-15 08:31 AM


Mikeys right, it did read like a song.

The liv bugs are gonna be massiiiiiive!

This, by the way, is perhaps my favourite ever of yours, yes it is.

so many clever lines i wish i'd written. abstract and perfect!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

Wind
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9 posted 2003-09-15 03:47 PM


lol...it's what happens when ya watch the wizard of oz and...what did I do after that? ohh..something about a robot or something...

and Riley...where the heck were ya girl? I'll hurt you if you run off again

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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