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Soul" an Immortal Child's Tale
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Soul" an Immortal Child's Tale |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
**Note: this is one of my 'Immortal Women' poems..I'm thinking I need to put them together in a book or something... Immortal child, whose name is Soul She joins in this Immortal game Warrior’s sword becomes her toy Wields it fiercely, without shame At twelve years old, a youngling still She wandered from Immortal camp Lost, alone and bewildered now Soon she grew weary, cold and damp Young Soul sank with the setting sun To rest ‘pon bed of fallen leaves Not knowing that her recklessness Was why her fearful mother grieves. Tis said that mortal men still hunt Women of the Immortal clans And if young Soul was to be found She’d likely die by some man’s hands The darkened night murmured her name A chant to keep her safe from harms When Sister Sun rose in the east Young Soul was cradled in her arms The Immortal they all called Young Soul N’er returned to Immortal clan Tis said she dances with moon’s light Safe from the sins of mortal man |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
An intriguing piece, Sharon. Stirring are the truths/reflections in some stanza's. I believe the soul to definately be immortal - though in some cases, I know many souls would wish otherwise. I sure would like to see this "whole" collection together. Send it to me if you can. Michael |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem Sharon! Yes I feel souls are immortal.....especially mine. Mine is the most immortialistiest!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great poem... i also think u should put this into a collection of poetry.. i would buy it  keep writing...bye  ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Much enjoyed! It had a great meter for the most part, flowed wonderfully.  I like the term "immortal child..." it's very thought-provoking... and I like that. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
When y' make the book, tell me! I soooo must buy a copy.  This story is so calming and beautiful.... and sadly wise. Encore!She said burn ... together. |
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