|Staring Back (repost)
since 2001-10-27Posts 1763
...in my boxers...
Your picture stares back at me
as I look into one wholly beautiful.
Time and it's demands may pull and plea,
but in the end I'm drawn to see.
The sight of you cements me inplace.
Do you know how beautiful you are?
Perhaps to cliched a phrase to
to do justice to your level, your bar.
Remember hearing of addicts with one tooth?
Their pain and fleeting joy?
No, no. For me, it's my money tree.
Seemingly to good to be real.
How is it you exist, how you be?
Why, love, do you even see me? Surreal.
Let alone know and fuel like no other.
Such a lovely woman you're becoming.
I'm scared to let you in.
Yet fearless. Yearning.
You warm the coldness that dwells beyond sway.
Love, I can't look away.
|© Copyright 2003 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI
Ahh...I don't remember this, but I enjoyed it this time around. Sort of made me wince, though, because of all your itsy bitsy grammatical errors. (Its is possessive, it's is a contraction. To is a preposition/adverb, too is an adjective. Catch my drift? ) I realize it's a repost and everything, but it's just hard for a grammar kid like me not to be put off by those types of things.
The poem itself was wonderful...You've uncovered some unique issues concerning relationships in general, some things of which we're not always aware.
"How inimitably graceful children are in general before they learn to dance!"
since 2001-02-15Posts 2681
Read and enjoyed muchly
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