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brian sites
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0 posted 2003-08-07 11:16 PM



dusk carries the lone
rattle
         calling
       all
      to gather

joining
at the right shade
of curtain

       voices
carrying
    the word

        the word that
humans
     tried
        to conjure
around fire

-a circle of eyes
and blurred arms

transporting time

-the word
      of an organ
under Bach's fingers

pale
    moonshadows
of this

      the original

I hear tonight

I wonder
if it is
the rehearsal

     the angels warming up
their lips...


           The earth
                  will
                       vibrate
in
ecstatic
    expectancy

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1 posted 2003-08-07 11:59 PM


      voices
carrying
    the word

        the word that
humans
     tried
        to conjure
around fire


~*~

thank you...
          rare are the times
                        when the music is so

softly played...

                     that the angels cry....

Bri...you have no idea,
[which is a cliche in itself]
how much this feels to me...

littlewing
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2 posted 2003-08-08 04:08 AM


Bri . . .
you must listen to Verdi
Requiem

the angels sing a much different tune
pure beauty
this and that
xxoo

Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 2003-08-08 10:43 AM


-a circle of eyes
and blurred arms

transporting time

......

enjoying this part most... apart from enjoying the complete write itself...

regards
sudhir

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4 posted 2003-08-08 11:17 AM


brian

Music is timeless, and writes to the senses of a higher plane...wonderful poem!

brian sites
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5 posted 2003-08-09 12:36 PM


thank you

I was just listening to the August bugs
singing
bouncing parts around like
some minimalist composer

gets to sounding like breathing after awhile

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6 posted 2003-08-09 03:02 PM


Like the whisper between notes.
Nicole
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7 posted 2003-08-09 08:33 PM


It's funny that you say like breathing, because that's what I was thinking when I looked at the poem as a whole.  The asthetic quality lends itself to a soft low rhythm - I really enjoyed that paired with the poem itself.

psh - you get inspired listening to bugs.  I have to beg and bribe my muse.  whatever.


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8 posted 2003-08-10 02:59 PM


It's beautiful poetry but I still don't understand the title.  This, the original... heh... the symphony of sound.  Nicely written, Mr. Sites...

Parasite

Faith is a fine invention
When gentlemen can see
But microscopes are prudent
In an emergency.
~~~Emily Dickinson

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9 posted 2003-08-10 06:13 PM


Wonderful writing Brian, I love reading this beautiful poetry of yours, thank you for sharing this with us

Andy

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10 posted 2003-08-16 02:38 AM



Ya know...I already thought this was amazing, and then
I read of your inspiration...and I was reminded...that you?...are truly beautiful.

Love this, Brian...

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

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11 posted 2003-11-13 10:47 PM


How did I miss this?

knowing now that you construct these instinctively, I'm more amazed than ever was at how profoundly the construction adds depth and layered meaning to the words.

You ARE a madviking genius...

or would that be?

"you
      ARE

   a    
mad   viking
genius..."

gleegiddy kissing you bri...

enimlegna!


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12 posted 2004-07-08 12:21 PM


wow
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13 posted 2005-08-20 10:05 PM


listening to the sounds of the night
and remembering
  where it was I heard August bugs....

missing your writings

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14 posted 2005-08-21 03:19 AM


Glad Kacy bumped this as I had not seen it before.  I love the line breaks you use Brian, they add so much to the reader.  Hey, how's about a new poem, too busy over summer?
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15 posted 2005-08-21 05:41 PM


Well, I happen to know that Bri has had trouble logging in--prolly 'cause he lost his password and changed e mails addresses since then.

I can prolly persuade him to write an administrator for help tho.

I TOLD him ya'll missed him!

(see, Bri? And nope I did not put anybody up to this.) nibble

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16 posted 2005-08-22 07:05 PM


Ahem!
Dark Angel
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17 posted 2005-08-22 11:37 PM


Sure would love to hear/read more about those August bugs before it becomes September  

Always a pleasure to read you Brian

Maree  



~i want for myself your trembling~

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18 posted 2005-08-23 12:30 PM


guess we'll just keep this one humming
hoping for a Bri visit soon

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19 posted 2005-08-24 08:01 PM


Lovely... nobody doesn't like a fugue.. especailly when there's poetry like this to accompany it.

Love's a lovely lad
His bringing up is beauty
Who loves him not is mad
For I must pay him duty
-Anonymous

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20 posted 2006-10-03 12:37 PM


This stunning poem is no exception to the general rule....when I read a poem of yours, I always find myself reading it several times through. Never fails!

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21 posted 2006-10-03 02:47 PM


Thanks for bringing this back, Ed. It's still one of my alltime favorite Pips poems, and I really do miss this poet!
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22 posted 2006-10-03 03:07 PM


I am seriously enjoying this poem-mining I've been doing -- glad someone else is benefitting too!
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23 posted 2007-03-26 10:30 AM


Missing your poetry, Bri!

-a circle of eyes
and blurred arms

transporting time


wish you'd return for a moment

serenity blaze
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24 posted 2007-03-26 01:07 PM


smile

I was fussin' at him just last week, kace.

and hey you--check your e mail.

You inspired a story outta me. (I know it's not bri's poetry, but it's the best I can do until I can try to make Bri's fingers pick up a pen again.)

Ain't he beautiful?

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25 posted 2007-07-08 03:15 PM


hey K, my email server has been eating emails regularly! try my new one, by replying here

oh Bri! we are chanting for you
to come out of the woods for a moment
PLEASE!?!

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