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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-07-05 04:28 AM

"I could be a star, you know?"
she said this as she licked the glue
on the edge of cigarette
talking to herself.

Then she squeezed a form to shape
twist and licked it, artfully.
"I could be a star..." She paused.

"If only I could hear applause."

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1 posted 2003-07-05 07:36 AM

Well, there goes my wisecrack about what's the other hand doing....this poem is too meaningful.

I could write a book about the signifigance of these words....excellent!

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2003-07-05 08:21 PM

you are a star baby...
shining silver blue

(and this poem is cooler than cool)

Had such a Bette Davis feel to it

Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first.

(bumper sticker humor) ;)

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3 posted 2003-07-05 10:12 PM

Awesome.  Wonderful.  Better than words can describe..

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4 posted 2003-07-05 11:08 PM

The sound of one head shaking...
(ignore those rocks   )
"Cooler than cool"...said it pretty well.
Though I was seeing a bit of Janis...

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2003-07-06 01:10 AM

smiles and grins--


That's ME.

A combo of Bette Davis and Janis Joplin.

heh heh...


pssst....thanks you!

brian sites
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6 posted 2003-07-06 11:31 AM




of you

hear that applause
hug you

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7 posted 2003-07-06 03:25 PM

serenity...yours and mine...that makes two hands clapping!  
Kit McCallum
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8 posted 2003-07-06 03:41 PM

I liked the picture this drew, Karen ... echoing JM here ... this does indeed have a Bette Davis feel to it. Much enjoyed  

PS ... I loved the title too!

Best wishes,

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (07-06-2003 03:43 PM).]

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9 posted 2003-07-06 03:44 PM

I heard thunder in this one

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10 posted 2003-07-07 10:39 PM

This has gotta be the coolest write I've seen from you.  Love the images here, your playful words and message is brilliant.  And now you know why I want to be like you when I grow up


Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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11 posted 2003-07-07 11:14 PM

Thanks you guys.

And I really shouldn't be laughing, but???

It took some time, but I just realized both Bette Davis and Janis Joplin are dead.

Hmmmm...maybe I need to re-think this, eh?

Thanks for reading, and Honeybee? You just keep being yourself. Yer doing fine, lovie.

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12 posted 2003-07-07 11:25 PM

How true, and how very, very sad don't you think?
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13 posted 2003-07-13 03:17 PM

Serenity, you crazy girl... the cigarette is such an enticing image, it's one of my favourites.  A secret addiction that is a symbol of class and sophistication--funny in that way, isn't it?  How we take our faults and instead of cloaking them, boast them as virtues and impress them onto future generations.  

It's sexy, even... licking the cigarette, the secret, dark need... and musing over fame and renown... just like the cigarette itself--all that makes a star is the sound of applause.  I could be a star if people clapped.

Depressing, utterly and strikingly depressing... haha... but still clever.  I can laugh and cry.

You brilliant girl, Karen...


Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley

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14 posted 2003-07-14 04:43 PM

K - there is applause get the plugs out of your ears Lady . . .

and as for the Bette and Janis OMG
so so true - LMAO - even though yes
ok they are dead but still . . .

as always
leaving me with eyes wide open

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