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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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with a pull upon the strap sliding down my arm intrigued and grieve of tell me tales my eyes tell the yesterday as I tug upon the sleeve asking for a quarter... where are you? not there for me? and yes, it's always been like that. You the vagabond in drift I pulled the rabbits out of hat wishing you could see. I pulled the chartreusse and I laughed knowing I had done my worst. My eyes tell the yesterday "c'mon baby, wipe the sleeve" Five another quarter up as proof to me that I believe in these motions of the cross and ashes? just another dust of broom to keep me--as I sigh. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is certainly a good haunting poem I'll add to my library. I like the rhythm the lines have. 2+2=5 for sufficiently large values of 2 |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, Serenity....I wait for the day you try me on for sighs.... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
You the vagabond in drift I pulled the rabbits out of hat wishing you could see. I pulled the chartreusse and I laughed knowing I had done my worst. Nicely done, Karen. There's a certain something to this piece that I can't put my finger on but it's a joy to read - even multiple times. Keep 'em coming.  ~AF~ I'm not being rude. You're just insignificant. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
I wonder what sighs 'deer is? No I don't either! Sheesh, what was I thinking? But I'll sigh with you anytime Karen. Lovely write. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I'm adding this to my library Maree. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
 LARRY!!!! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
LMAO @ Larry and 'deer. And now I've forgotten what I was going to say. Damn, it was good too...  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
those tell me tales are more than enough aren't they Karen. Your words sigh me more often than I wish... but that at least releases the tension. hugs M |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I had trouble interpreting this (sometimes the case with your poetry), but after reading it a few times I've decided it's about denial. Talking to the yesterday and wishing that it could be changed somehow by the things that we do in the today. But no matter how many rabbits you pull out of your hat, you can't change the past, and that's always going to be with you... always going to laugh at your success... It's a very sad poem... if I'm reading it correctly... and my heart goes out to you, Karen. My own opinion? You shouldn't talk to yesterday. Take what you need from it and leave the rest behind. Tomorrow's all that matters... Brian Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I got the feeling it was about religion. The giving of money to the collection plate doesn't make you worthy and when prayers don't get answered you do the best you can. Just my thoughts....But whatever it meant to you, Karen, it is like everything you write...perfect in the way you tell it. Susan |
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